Gack--gah--ack--kaff--sputter....
Geez, when you say dark, you mean dark...
     Anyway, I liked this--interesting premise. 
     Now--what did the radiation do to Mousse's curse?  Maybe...things to 
address in the next section--how does Ryoga change, after this. I think 
he'd take Akane's death very hard. For that matter--how does Ranma react 
to Shampoo's death? I'd think it would be very hard to watch a friend die 
slowly, moreso when said friend (and company) are people used to being in 
prime condition.  Also to be addressed--how does everyone else change?
     Also--what does Ranma do with his time, now that Akane's gone?  Does 
he hunt down mutant animals, does he perfect his skills, meditate, what? 
Does he hold Mousse responsible for the injury, or does he view it as 
being indirectly caused by the mutation, i.e. Mousse isn't in full 
control of himself anymore? 
     Anyway, good work. Though I think you should finish Letters and all 
the stories that one opens up first. ^_^


Kevin Eav--First Deacon of the Church of Ryouga, Keeper of the Compass, 
                          Member of C.A.S.K.E.T.
email:geist@holly.colostate.edu --  IRC:Ishido at #ranma! -- Ishido@RanmaMUCK
"The world...is a dark and lonely place...beyond hope, beyond care..."-Ryouga
                 Member of Okonomiyaki Addicts Anonymous
"C'mon kiddo.  You've got to *find* Akane.  You really are a pain in the 
                  fanny sometimes, ya know Ryouga?"-Ukyo