Matt Trotter engraved:

  Heres another character intro.  I'm sure you'll guess where this is 
going.
I'm still hacking on the same logo that takes an hour to render, so it
looks like I'll get some more done today.  Again, C&C please!  Finaly this
one's for Mike Loader, thanks for replying.  Hope you like it...

WOW! I hit the big time! A dedication!

C&C for the kid...
   You've definitely followed the mantra of show, not tell. I like the 
way you throw in asides without breaking up the flow of the story..nice 
touch. While the overall tone is nicely Cyberpunk, the use of humor in 
descriptions was cool. Miltitant Beef Jerky. *snicker*
   I found myself feeling a bit sorry for the kid after I got done 
reading. Poor bastard. >-)
   The discription of the Kid himself was my favorite part. After the 
second paragraph, I had me a nice little mental photo.
   Good stuff. An improvement on the Old Man, if only because you cut the 
script bits and focused on descriptive writing, which you seem to have a 
flair for.

-Mike of No Particular Title or Handle

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