Normally, I would have included the original story, and just commented on 
the bits that needed it.  But this one doesn't need much.

Mainly, I wanted to know why Ranma, Mousse, Shampoo, Akane, Kodachi, & 
Kuno would be working together!  And why not Ukyo too?

Otherwise, you have captured the feel of a Callahan's, but it is *not* 
Callahan's.  It is clearly a different kind of place, with a different 
crowd, with their own style.  Bi-weekly fights, a band instead of 
individual players, all of them young, and...  they may not all have 
their own story.  Spider has always been a favorite of mine, and this is 
a worthy tribute to him.