(whimper)
I wasn't really a Kuno fan before I read this, but now I think better of 
the guy....

Oooh!
Yay Foxx!
I like I like!
I haven't seen this side of Kuno before.
Spiffy.

But a couple o' comments:
  Use single periods.  The ellipse (... and ....) give the idea of a 
sentence or idea trailing off (see above ^_^); periods work better for 
narration. 
  Kuno's dialogue didn't seem quite as floweringly poetic as it is in the 
anime and manga.  That's probably a good thing - his constant Shakespearean 
spouting would probably be too much in some scenes and come off comical - 
but it should still be formal.
  
  Because I have no life, I'm going to go ahead and make more suggestions 
directly on your fanfic and send it back to you.  All these are, of 
course, just my little 2 cents, my personal thoughts, MHO.  ^_^
 
  This fanfic is really something.  With a bit of cleaning up, it could 
become an object of worship. ^_^

-joyce, Disciple of Kasumi

Reading fanfics by moonlight,
Skipping classes by daylight,
Never running from a sig fight,
She is the one named Sailor Slacker!