Not too much to criticize... The only parts that may need
correction, I'm not qualified to comment on... ^_^ In any case, I love your
characterization.  The personalities spring into three dimensions from the
manga/anime's two (two and a half, tops).  The lemon scenes were nicely
handled.  Like Heinlein, you managed to incorporate them into the story as
part of the story, so that I wouldn't be able to tell, had I not read the
alpha, that they were later additions...  Again, like RAH, you manage to be
thorough, yet never vulgar.  ie, You have a good sense of balance.  The
Akari/Konatsu scenes were deftly handled (and they make a lot more sense now
that I've seen a copy of vol 36 of the manga!).  Nothing really to change,
unless there's something YOU'RE unhappy with...  Mainly, I'm writing to let
you know that not *everyone* ignores your stories, as you complained
earlier...  Good job! [Can't wait to see what you'll come up with for the
megafic... ^_^]

Arigatou gozaimashita! ^_^ Hmmm...I'm not sure how to do the ending, though.
Got to figure out those last lemon bits... :p  Oh, well... thanks!

Kun-chan...