On Sat, 2 Mar 1996, Julian Fong wrote:

Usagi and Mamoru got the humor story.  There is some serious stuff, but 
I intended this to be the funniest story.    

Read above. I think the slapstick killed it. But I have one question (stupid 
really), why was Ranma with Shampoo?

YEt another Ranma date Shampoo to get X situation.

	I think what bothered me about the story wasn't the slapstick as
such, but the huge number of crossover characters.  Ranma, Shampoo, Ataru,
Kyosuke, Hikaru, Madoka, Keiichi and Belldandy don't fit into the story very
well; they seem like they don't belong.  It might work if this were The
Surreal World, but not here.

The Surreal World?
 

	(I was expecting Natsumi and Miyuki to be the police officers who
gave Mamoru the ticket!)

Heh.  Didn't think of that :)
 

That AMI is corrupting Usagi?  I can't see how anyone who knows Ami could 
actually believe that...

I thought she was more concerned for Ami than Usagi. After all she did say 
Usagi was dragging Ami's grade's down. Still, you must have something 
against the SM parent's. You have them putting down both Usagi and Ami 
in 2 part's of your fic..

Worrying about your children is an important part of parenthood, as is 
disapproving of some of their friends.

	It's not inconceivable that Usagi's mother would believe that Ami is
a bad influence on her (so Luna and Rei didn't have to freak out at the
idea.)  Usagi knows better than anyone else that being a Sailor Senshi
hasn't been a totally unmixed blessing upon her life.

Yep.  It's brought her a lot of pain.

John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu   http://falcon.cc.ukans.edu/~ranma/index.html 
"Love is the image you place around your significant other, and how close 
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the mold."--Orlando de La Cruz