A nice, very sweet story. Still has quite the same style from 'No Mere Mortal' I see. Well, here are some coments for you:

	"Hee, hee, hee," Belldandy giggled.

Drop the "hee"s they're redundant and don't convey the expression anyway.

	"I'm sorry, Keiichi-san.  I won't worry or think about

anything but you and I for the rest of the evening."<

Waayyy too apologetic. Even for Belldandy. How about "Aright" instead of "I'm sorry" and drop the "won't worry" while you're at it.

And in doing so, he learned that heaven did exist.

Well, this IS Morisato Keiichi we're talking about here. The man who has three goddesses living with him. Fits the atmosphere though.

	Urd continued to lay in the courtyard, laughing hysterically.

Her face had turned red, and since she had forgotten to breathe,  she
was on the verge of passing out from the lack of oxygen reaching
her brain.<

I've always wondered if dieties had to worry about such problems. Have you?

She laid in a small creator surrounded by scorch marks,

TWO spelling errors in the same part of a sentence? I haven't seen anything this bad since I graduated from high school. It's "lay" not "laid" and "crater" not "creator". Tisk, tisk. Luckly, they're the only ones I've managed to find.

As he approached Skuld, the young boy interposed himself between them.

And held his hammer in a most threatening manner, yes?

Finally, you might consider adding a few words about _why_ Kenji is here and mentioning that this is a side story to "No Mere Mortal". Wouldn't hurt to advertise yourself you know.