Okay, well written, but some real continuity failures, starting 
around the time Priss gets on the bike.

Priss: gets on bike, still in hardsuit
Sylia: In van, talking to Blackie, in hardsuit
Priss: Stopped at accident, talking to Leon. (still in hardsuit?)
Leon: Calls Priss by name, in public.
Priss: Told to leave site by Sylia, over intercom
Sylia: In van, pulls up at accident. (still in hardsuit?)
Leon: Unsurprised by having a heavy van pull up, with Mackie driving.
Mackie: Calls Sylia 'Sis' while handing finger to Leon. (not hidden 
             from view)

This sequence makes no sense. Priss seems to hop in and out of her 
HS, and Mackie casually reveals to anybody whos watching or 
listening, who one of the KS is. AND unless the back of the van is 
soundproof, Blackie can hear everything as well.