HUZZAHH!!!  I loved it - that was great!  

This was some of the best writing I've seen come across the net in a long
time (sorry, folx!) - I was impressed with strong use of Japanese and the
Japanese wedding - I'm assuming they are were all correct just by the use of
them - wow.  Another strong point was the pacing - I liked the little one
liners, like, Mousse still waited at the Nekohanten.  Also your choice of
discriptive terms the use of those terms was very nice.  One problem I see
in a lot of fanfics, is the lack of good discription.  It's always the same,
I didnt' see that here - it all felt fresh.

Good Job.

my favorit line (adlibbed) : Shampoo shook her empty head. It rattled.

*STAMP* 'This fanfic is now supplied with the gopher seal of approval.'

[not that that means much.... oh, well!] ;)

AlberCrombie

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