An Enjoyable story.

The beginning seems a bit perfunctory, and to be honest, I don't see that 
guy in the leisure suit is worth having later on - he has no reason to 
hang around and intervene in things - at least not that you've shown.

The training scenes come together nicely and the change from a average 
joe to a crash hot martial artist is reasonably handled.

But one point that isn't looked at at all is how the "other" Ranma's life 
was different to "our" Ranma's - there should be a least a few friends 
wondering why Ranma is ignoring them, and his family seemed awfully 
accepting of the changes in his behaviour - just little things like 
different habits and hobbies, promises to friends that "our" Ranma has no 
idea were actually made.  And the occasional thing that the family will 
take for granted, but Ranma has no idea about.

A minor quibble over dating as well - in the Manga/Anime timeline Genma 
took Ranma away from Nodoka at a very young age, no more than 3 years old 
at most.  Ranma was 6 when he met Ukyou for the first time.  Ranma signed 
the promise to become a mans-man in the Manga/Anime timeline by banging 
his hands on as he was too young to know what it was - 6 year olds can 
write (not well... but..) and Ranma should still have had memories of his 
mother if he had left her at 6 whereas in the M/A timeline, he knew 
nothing about her until they were introduced.

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