On Thu, 8 Feb 1996, Harold Ancell wrote:

Careful Destiny 1 is wonderful, but the ending doesn't quite work for
me; something else is required, perhaps a response by Akane....  Or
perhaps Ranma should ask her out on a date....

Er... isn't Akane in a state of shock and sadness? If not for the 
blundering Kuno, then for herself.  Why would ANYONE ask a crying sobbing
girl for a date at that moment? (btw, if I'm commenting on the wrong 
fanfic, please don't scream. ^_^)

If you want to transition into the more familiar relationship style,
you could have for Akane an internal drama where her knight in shining
armor becomes an imperfect human being.  Working in a sort of romantic
encounter or tryst between Ranma and Akane before the fight would help
that (but would change chapter 1 a fair amount).

Hmm....  Something about family honour... and perhaps integrity... and just
mayby a bit of loyalty... those things count. And last time I checked, 
Akane was not lacking in those areas.  Cooking ability maybe, but not the 
above.  Even if she saw her "knight" as being flawed as a ruby after 
sandblasting, she'd stick by him.  She wouldn't give up on someone.  

Just my financial addition to the poker game of life. ^_-

Wing. 

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