This has a lot of promise.  Interesting concept.

Question: what happens when Dailey starts making passes at Al?  Or Leon when
Leona?  What about Al and Nene?  Enquiring minds want to know this stuff!

You're off to a good start, however, I thought the 'tourture talk' session
needs to be redone.  It was too much like Act III (?) of Dominion - try for
a little more originality.  

Can't wait for the next part.

AlberCrombie

 
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