On Tue, 6 Feb 1996, AlberCrombie wrote:

'D'Artagnan' Frank Ho verbalized:

Communications Breakdown - SeaTac Airport chair at Concourse C

OH, COOL!!  I wonder if my friends at Wizards of the Coast might stumble on
that?  They already know I'm a little nuts, this will really show 'em!

AlberCrombie

PS.  Wadda think of the story?

Since I read it last week and have read another five fanfics today, my 
comments and recollections might be a bit fuzzy.

It was *different*.  The storyline is certainly a new spin.  It keeps 
enough elements from the original to get good continuity, but the new 
spin you put on it is *very* original.  While I wouldn't qualify it for 
original flavor, which is my favorite genre, it's certainly not out in left 
field.  Let's call it a really good *alternative* type fanfic.  I liked it.

The grammar was fine, I didn't spot any glaring errors.  They same can be 
said about typos and wordos.  There were no factual errors or 
displacements in the story.  No problems at all with the readibility.

They storyline flowed well at a nice pace that varied enough to keep the 
reader's interest and attention without "steam-rollering".  
Characterizations were excellent, especially for Kunou and Kodachi.  I 
did feel that Ranma and Akane drifted off a bit and seemed slightly out 
of character.  I, personally, subscribe to the theory that even if they 
were to declare their love for each other, and get married and all that, 
they would still argue and fight.  However, they would probably make up 
instead of running away or ignoring each other until it boiled over and 
they both independantly decided to forget about it.

On a fanfic scale, I'd have to say it's one of the better fanfics I've read.

BTW: Yes, us fanfic nuts here at UW do have a fanfic rating scale.

Frank

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