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Aii-Yah!!   more! More! MORE! MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!

1) I liked the interplay between Ranko and Ranma, it felt... right...
I guess is the word for it.

2) I think the fight between Ranma and Kuno should have been more
detailed.  Not necessarily so much longer, just more descriptions,
possibly include what the characters were thinking, and maybe draw
it out just a little more.

3) The same is true for Ranma's retraining.  Maybe just another
paragraph or two, showing him regaining his skills over the two
weeks.

Dan Root - dar@andrew.cmu.edu
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     I pulled BCWYWF from the remailer a couple of weeks ago. It was ok, but 
somehow it seemed kind of...... rushed. That comes closest to what I feel.

     As for any C&C, what Dan said I agree with. Keep up the good work.



               Fozzy Bear
               (coutureg@comm.hq.af.mil)
               (fozzy@radix.net)