Aii-Yah!!   more! More! MORE! MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!

Now normally I don't comment too much... But for this one I just
had to comment.  I really wanna see where this goes.  I actually
ended up missing my stats class to finish reading it.  <much more
groveling deleted for breviety's sake>

Technically I can't offer much help (I can't spell to save my ***
that's what ispell and proofreaders are for).  My only comments on
the actual plot are as follows:

1) I liked the interplay between Ranko and Ranma, it felt... right...
I guess is the word for it.

2) I think the fight between Ranma and Kuno should have been more
detailed.  Not necessarily so much longer, just more descriptions,
possibly include what the characters were thinking, and maybe draw
it out just a little more.

3) The same is true for Ranma's retraining.  Maybe just another
paragraph or two, showing him regaining his skills over the two
weeks.

Keep up the good work

	-DaR
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Dan Root - dar@andrew.cmu.edu