Excellent fanfic! (You may be wondering why its taken me this long to give
feedback on your current fanfic.   Well, its because I've gone searching for
the first eight episodes of this fanfic and read them all!  I must say, this
is the best fanfic in its genre, Bubblegum Crisis.  The characters are
animate and believable, but you're abilitiy to create new hardware for the
hardsuits using a 20th century eduaction I find hard to believe.  A lot of
things can happen in 30 years, I do I know. :)

I've got some comments for your fanfic:

    Almost before he realized he was doing it, Bert reached
out, tilting her chin up gently with his hand, leaning
forwards while pulling her a bit closer at the same time,
and softly kissed Priss on the lips.  She twitched in
surprise, but didn't... quite ...withdraw.  It felt kind of
nice, actually, sparking some kind of a warm glow in the
back of her mind.  Almost of their own accord, her lips
responded to his, and her arms came up, sliding around him
in a hug.

I've been waiting for this moment to happen...  I was hoping that it would
of been Bert and Priss that would be the ones that would become the 'couple'
since the beginning, instead of Nene (but, this is your fanfic, and I have
no power to change it).  They just seemed like they would just match,
personality and everything.  I wonder what Bert will do now, with feeling
for both Nene and Priss on his mind?  (kinda of a Ranma-ish situation here!)

concrete of a building wall.  Weary resignation suddenly
filled him; after several years, it appeared like he was
finally going to die at the hands of a rogue boomer.  His

What!?!!?  Leon die at the hands of a boomer?!?!  Perhaps the luckiest
person employed at ADP (perhaps next to Nene for the way she's been getting
beaten around).
I cannot see Leon die at the hands of a boomer... but at the hands of
someone like Hollister, perhaps.

Keep those fanfics coming!  Can't wait to read the next one in the series!


Ozymandias aka Jon Quirit
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