Compared to the other 5, this one felt like it was a bit rushed.  I 
especially liked how the storyline of "Tales of Ranma & Nabiki" is 
starting to deviate from the original Ranma storyline.  This is giving 
the fanfic a richer flavor than it originally did.  The pacing of the 
story so far is excellent, as it's easy to see the gradually 
development/change in the characters over the course of the six chapters.

It read great, they story is great and I want to read more.

My only 'real' comment was that part 6 did seem kind of short and was a 
bit thin it detail, it covered a goodly amount of ground.  Fleshing it 
out and adding some more angst elements would've made it just about 
perfect.  I don't miss the lack of comedic elements, as this fanfic seems 
to be too serious for the comedic elements to fit in.

Another great chapter,

Frank


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