Couture, George, A1C, SAM-OPTS wrote:

    Wonderful weather we are having, isn't it? Thanks for your offer of 
assistance. The following is basically background. I await the comments with 
baited breath.

OK, here goes:

<general snippage follows>

Linna decides their first date (the second will be 
explained later) will be at a surprise birthday party for Priss (more on 
that later as well), which is where we first see him.

So Linna's going to admit to the world in general that she knows Priss well
enough to throw a birthday party for her?

When the ADP guardian boomers went crazy in 
BGC! ep 3 Meltdown, he was killed.

So this takes place after Crash?  If you are going to get Nene and Mackie
together, when did Mackie come back from Germany, and is Sylia still there?

    The college courses would prove useful, however. It seems that dad came 
across a pair of 33-s boomers that were in need of repair. The boomers' 
damage was not too extensive, but it was severe. One's AI seemed to have 
been corrupted by what appeared to be a virus. 

Must be Anri

The other boomer also had major organ damage. 
Again difficult to replace. At least boomer B's AI was mostly intact.

Must be Sylvie

(Well, those are the only 33-S boomers, except for their friends who died on
Genaros, that we've ever met...

This would be 
a good way to start the new series. 

Suggestion: if you're going to do a series, try to make each story as
stand-alone as possible.  It is (IMO) good if they build on, and refer to,
things in the earlier stories.  But a common problem with series is that
many writers end each story with a "To Be Continued" cliffhanger. If, for
whatever reason, the author doesn't finish the series, it leaves the readers
hanging.

Seeing how Linna and Nene scramble to 
organize such an event, what with an odd boomer rampage or somesuch 
interrupting things, should be fun.

Nene's going to admit to the world that she knows Priss well enough to throw
her a birthday party?

Maybe Vision could show up for the party 
with a little present, a recording contract.

George, I think you might be pushing things a little here.  Reika knows
Linna, but does she know the others?  Does *Vision* know any of them?

    In the second episode, we get some background on Linna's new boyfriend. 
It is at this time that Kyle finally puzzles out how to restore boomer A's 
AI without wiping its memory. To celebrate this occasion, he takes it to his 
second date with Linna. 

Second date with a girl and he brings another woman, a 33-S Boomer (AKA 'a
sex toy') along with him?

Due to a strange quirk of fate, the date is at Hot 
Legs. Linna is dumbfounded upon seeing boomer A. Priss is shocked 
speechless. 

Seeing that it's Sylvie, I'd say so.  Does she see her before, during, or
after her show?

  

    Who or what the antagonist will be, I've no clue. At least I don't 
think I do. In any event, a rough sketch of the first scene should be coming 
soon.

Suggestion: I'd come with an antagonist soon, even if you're not going to
use him/her/it for a while.  It'll give you some direction to go for.  Maybe
some foreshadowing in stories before he/she/it first appears?

              Fozzy Bear
              (coutureg@comm.hq.af.mil)
              (fozzy@radix.net)

P.S. There will be a snowball fight in the Pentagon's Center Courtyard at 
1600. Be there!

Sorry - don't think I can make it.  I'm buried under a foot and a half of
new snow in southern New Jersey, with a blizzard currently going on, 12 more
inches expected, and sleet/freezing rain due to happen sometime before it
all ends tomorrow afternoon...



Jeanne Hedge

jhedge@waterw.com ==============================================
"Water, water everywhere, nor any drop to drink..."
    --Samuel Taylor Coleridge, 'The Rime of the Ancient Mariner'