Subject: Re: [FanFic] [fanfic] [And Life Goes On]
From: White Wolf
Date: 1/1/1996, 4:34 PM
To: fanfic@andrew.cais.com

On Mon, 1 Jan 1996, Isabel Arantes wrote:

        'And Life Goes On'
 
                        Part 1, chapter 4: Won't you dream of me?
[snip]
        "What it say? Hmmm... ':If one's husband is defeated another
 male in battle, and does not win within two weeks, the wife must marry
 the victor. (This only applies if the wedding ceremony has not been
 performed yet)'" Shampoo looked up, confused. "Why this important
 to Shampoo? Ranma always win, I have no need worry."
[snip]
        "Great-grandmother, you really need to have more faith in Ranma.
 No one can beat him."
[snip]  
        "Oh, my pig-tailed-girl... how I long to pull thee into my embrace,
 and keep you there forever by holding you with the strength in my arms.
 When that happens, we can be together forever! But, if that was to happen,
 I would not be able to hold onto Tendo Akane! I am only so large, and
 I fear to be fair to the both you, I would have to hug separately." Kuno
 said to the portrait of his beloved pig-tailed-girl. 

Can you say foreshadowing?

        "Surrender? Only Akane would do such a cowardly thing with
 a wimp like you."

That's a bit much, even for Ranma.

        It happened so quickly that no one could believe it. The bag flew
 towards Ranma's head, but before it could make contact,
 Kuno's bokken pushed it away, and smashed into the tough skull
 of Ranma's head. Ranma stood for a moment, resisting the blow,
 then gave away, crumpling onto the ground.

Could you rewrite this part?  I can't picture what you're trying to say.

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