Subject: Re: Final Revisions, Moonlight & Cherry Pie, Chaps. 1-7
From: White Wolf
Date: 12/30/1995, 11:30 AM
To: fanfic@andrew.cais.com

On Sat, 30 Dec 1995, Andy Skuse wrote:

please eat?  I don't want to be late to school."
[I don't want to be late for school.] might sound better.
Check.
corner.  "Oh, Skuld!  I'll... be right out."  Skuld blinked a few time. 
[Skuld blinked a few times.]
Check.
	"Perhaps we should can call your wife now.  I'm sure if Ranma was
[Perhaps we should call your wife now.]
Check.

Good story! I don't read much Ranma fic but it's growing on me :)
Now who was that talking to Ran-chan? Hmmmm. Didn't *sound*
like Shampoo ;)

She said Ran-chan, so of course it was Ukyo.  Do I need to clear that up?


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