HI! This is your friendly naborhood Sage here, now a proud grad of
ENC1101! When I passed my English corse I decided to take a look back at
Ghost Tails, what did I find?? It SUCKED!!! Aarrgg... I don't know if I have
improved because of ENC1101, but when I saw what I wrote, I "ACKED"! So,
what else could I do but re write the whole story to make it sound like a
story should... smooth!
Now I leave it in your hands, did my writing improve?? Should I
contiune re-writeing the whole story?? Does it just suck hard eather way
and I should just deleat it and move on?? Oh! If you read this before, read
it again... I have added ALOT of new stuff to the first chapter alone...
Thanks again =]
Note 1: Please excuse the spelling, i'm in the process of getting a spell chack!
Note 2: I hope there is no line wrap problems, if there are, im sorry and
ill try to fix the prob with my next post...
Note 3: Iasbel, please, KILL HER!
Ghost Tails
Japan| Tokyo | Furinkan High | 3:05 PM
1
School had just ended for the day at Furinkan High. Ranma was
taking great care to avoid Akane, they'd gotten into another big fight on
the way to school. At lunch, he refused to eat the meal that she'd
specially prepared for him, claiming "I'd like to live long enough to see
dinner." That made her mad enough to punch him through the cafeteria
wall.
When school ended, Ranma darted out of class before Akane could
even ask where he was going. Ranma had bin beat on enough for one day so,
to avoid another fight, he made a direct line for the schools front doors.
Now outside the school, he had to worry about his other problems. Kuno,
Kodachi, Ukyou, Shampoo, etc. The list went on and on, but, it seemed that
fortiune smiled upon Ranma today for not a single one of his problems was
waiting for him in the school yard. Now crusing out of the school yard and
into the street it was smooth sailing, at least till the next time he saw
Akane.
Deciding to take a shortcut home through an alley, Ranma turned
to see a startled Ryoga walking towards him.
"How did you get all the way out here?", the confused Ryoga asked.
"All the way out here?! Ryoga, were in Nerma"
"We, we, we, we are?"
"Ryoga, your such a fool!"
"But yesterday I was in Oasaka, or was it Kobe?"
Ranma sighed and put his hand to his forehead.
"What an idiot he is! Can't even figure out what city he's in."
Thought Ranma.
"Well, it's bin fun but I have to go, see you around P-Chan?"
Ranma said sarcasticly.
"Huh, what, how dare you call me that," shouted the visibly angry
Ryoga.
Ranma was in a way suprised at Ryoga's reaction. Ryoga had
gotten used to being called P-Chan when Akane was not around. Why did he
get so upset at being called P-Chan now? Ranma would have thought about
this more if Ryoga had not picked up a rather large trashcan overflowing
with garbage and threw it at him.
"Ranma!" Ryoga shouted as he lifted the trashcan above his head.
"I cannot allow you to call me P-Chan anymore" Ryoga said as he let
lose with his improvised weapon.
Ranma easily dodged the deadly can.
"That was really sad, even for you," Ranma joked.
Ryoga was now a mixture of surprise and outrage at what the still
living Ranma had just said.
"That's it, prepare to die!" he roared as he
leapt into the air.
Ranma took a defensive stance, ready for the
outstretched foot of his opponent. Ranma din't really want to fight, but he
wanted to run away even less.
Akane was stuned when Ranma took off so quickley. She wonderd
if she was really that bad to be with? Deciding she would rather be walking
than sitting at her desk; she got up, grabbed her schoolbag and headded into
the hallway.
"Maby Nabiki could walk with me home, it was better than walking
alone." Akane thought.
When Akane has all ready left she had no choice but to keep
herself componey for the walk home. As she left the school and entered into
the front lawn she was greatley depressed to see the love struck Kuno
waiting for her on the sidewalk with a large boket of flowers in hand.
Knowing she could not excape, she chose to take the only root left, foward.
As Akane approched Kuno a smile could be seen slip across Kuno's face.
She knew what was coming next, and just as pridicted, Kuno handed the
flowers to her and then told her to, "Take these as a token of his love for
her."
She accepted the flowers not knowing what else to do.
"I know i'm going to regret this," she thought.
"Would you date with me?", the now hopeful Kuno asked as he got
down on one knee.
"Oh! Not again," thought Akane.
"Kuno, I gotta go," she said as she attempted to run off.
Kuno was so pleased that she had accepeted his gift that he could not
just let his love get away. He sprung to his feet and blocked Akane's
excape root.
"Oh Kuno, what now?"
"Ah, Akane you will be my . . . . ." Kuno began to say but Akane herd
this fimular ringing sound from behind her so she turned around just in time
to see Shampoo heading strait for her on her bisicycle. Akane doged to the
side at the last possible second and just avoided the collision that the
hapless Kuno was about to receive. BANG!!! Kuno never saw the lilac haired
girl on her bicycle coming.
"Silly Kuno, why you not get out of Shampoo's way? I ring bell for you
but you not move. I no want hit you, just stupid pervert girl."
Akane picked herself off the floor and dusted herself off. Normaly she
would have bin quite upset at Shampoo trying to run her over, but today she
was almost glad for Kuno was now happley sleeping on the sidewalk.
"Thanks for getting Kuno off my back Shampoo."
"Tomboy type girl no thank Shampoo. Shampoo try to kill Pervert girl."
As Shampoo was getting off her bike she remembered her deliverys she
had to make and how mad her great grandmother would be if the coustomers
received cold Ramen. With a quiet sigh she got back on to her bike and rode
off to finish her deliveries.
"I kill you one day," Shampoo said as she turned a nearby corner
and out of sight.
Akane not wanting to be here when Kuno woke up headed for home. She
never saw the tire track on the back of the fallen upperclassman.
Ranma blocked the foot of his outraged opponent. Ryoga bounced
off Ranma's arms, did a back flip in midair, and landed ten about feet away.
Pulling out his metal umbrella, Ryoga charged again. Holding his umbrella
high above his head, Ryoga swung down at Ranma. Ranma jumped back just in
time to avoid the attack which created a sizable crater where he'd been
standing.
"Woah, he's really juiced, maybe I shouldn't have made fun of him like
that, altho, what did I really say that could have made him so mad?"
thought the now surprised Ranma.
As Ranma landed, he decided to make his first attack. He ran towards
the charging Ryoga who was swinging his umbrella at Ranma's head. As Ranma
ducked under the umbrella, he launched his fist at the face of his rival.
Ryoga dodged left and readied his next attack, as did Ranma. They fought
this way, in the cramped confines of the alleyway for quite some time before
Ryoga ganed the upperhand.
Ryoga managed to get Ranma off balance by using an attack that's
designed to have your opponent block high, in such a way that would leave
their chest open.
"Ranma, you die now," shouted Ryoga as he punt-kicked Ranma's chest.
The kick launched Ranma into the air, out of the alley, and
crashing into the street. Ranma sprung up, dusted himself off, looked in
the direction of the alley and said "This fight isn't over yet." With
that said, he ran back in the direction of the alley.
After Akane lost Kuno, she continued her walk. She wondered why
Ranma always made fun of her. "I try so hard to cook for him. Does he
like my cooking? No. Does he even pretend to like my cooking? No. He
had made that perfectly clear."
Akane continued to walk, still lost in thought. "Hey, I learned
how to boil water without starting a fire. In a week or two I should be
able to cook rice without putting anyone in the hospital. Ranma you fool,
you jerk, you . . . . . . " Akane suddenly lost her train of thought when
she saw someone who looked a lot like Ranma come flying out of an alley
and go crashing into the street.
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"Curse those evil Octopi"
Brian Geringer
http://www.igc.net/~ranma204
"Kill her"
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