12/14/95
Well the votes are basically in for Lemonade Punch#2:
Ukyou: 18
Hinako: 17
Kasumi: 8
Sailor Moon: 3
Gargoyles: 1
Now I know that, democratically, Ukyou won but being the control
freak that I am, I'll be doing the Hinako story next. I figure
that Hinako only lost by one vote so only one more person would
be disappointed if I did a Ranma lemon starring Hinako... which
I don't think anyone else has done before.
WARNING!!! This message contains spoilers for my upcoming lemon
FanFic. If you're the type who refuses to read a book or watch
a movie when you know what's going to happen then read no further.
This message also vaguely refers to typical lemon situations so
if your offended by that then DON'T READ THIS!
Now that I'm through the formalities let me explain...
For my last story, "Ranma Fever", I received many good comments,
suggestions, ideas, and corrections... many which I felt really
would have made my FanFic better. Only, I have little time to go
back and change it. When I do have time I'm either too tired to
too lazy to do so. So this time I'll present a sketch of what I'm
planning and ask that you send you're comments and ideas first so
that I can develop the story with the improvements implemented.
A few points before I start sketching: I'm a stickler for
some semblance of plot in a lemon (Hah, lemon and plot in the same
sentence! But really there are some really good lemons out there
with well developed plot.). I can't stand getting throwing two
characters together making them have sex. I don't mind nudging,
pushing, maybe even shoving but I'm totally against throwing!
(i.e. I need some plot but only enough to barely justify their
actions.)
Another point is that I'm having real trouble implementing
humor(a essential part to Ranma, IMHO). So any easily implemented
gags would be greatly appreciated! I also try to keep my stories
splittable into two parts: a non-lemon beginning and lemon middle
and end. Just keep in mind I like to do this, I don't *have* to
do it that way. I also try to keep the stories one parters even
if that one parter is 30+K! (i.e. I don't like making multi-chapter
stories if I can help it.)
Finally, I don't really need help in(at least I don't think
I do) writing love scenes... just help in getting them in those
situations. If you have a scene you *really* want done then tell
me but otherwise, [no scenes with Hinako-chan (what I call Hinako
in her child form... is there a name difference they use in the
manga?) please] just plot/logic/situational/etc. help. I've got
several messy, incomplete, indecipherable roughs for this story
that I'm not gonna post so I'll just post this sketch... here goes.
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Lemonade Punch#2: "Hinako's Lesson"
Okay the insatiable Tendo sisters set the whole thing up. Kasumi
modifies Hentosai's Passion Fever dust to work on anyone. It has
three forms, all are aphrodisiacs but they do different things:
1. Increased pheromones and increased awareness of
pheromones used if you want two or more people to
specifically link up.
2. Blind passion. Affects only the victim into being
attracted to almost anyone they had some attraction for.
3. Mass blind passion. Causes the victim and the persons
around him/her to go into blind passion.
(I have no idea how to explain this in the story or if I should
even bother to do so... in retrospect, it doesn't seem that
important.)
Anyway Kasumi puts Dust number one into Ranma's lunch causing him
to get horny at school during lunch. She does something similar
to Hinako-sensi through some sort of gift (perfume quite
possibly).
The gift is for Hinako's impartial grading of Ranma, else he'd fail.
This story takes the alternate route that Ranma didn't quit trying
stop Hinako's ability and has been succeeding for now; Hinako
only
has two weeks (variable) left. A horny Hinako develops a plan
that
basically makes Ranma have sex with her for the rest of the two
weeks, that way Ranma won't want to hit her pressure points so
she
can keep her ability.
Hinako starts her plan by lecturing him about
his test scores while doing suggestive things. Then she forces
him
into accepting her tutoring. During sessions she does even more
seductive, suggestive things, trying to break down his defenses.
Ranma seeking relief goes to Akane. Akane helps him relieve his
tension but later Ranma is forbidden to "partake" by Genma and Soun
because of his recent grades(Why they suddenly stress grades I
don't know), or for some other reason. This drives Ranma mad
with
need but he still maintains desperate control. He gets thoughts
he
feels he shouldn't have while at school while the typical three
girls fight over him. Trying to maintain his control he runs
back
into he school and wants to change into a girl so he attempts to
dump acid on his head (thinking it's water) when Hinako tosses
pencil-boards to knock the acid out of his hands(sorry... too
much
Sailor Moon). Somehow, the girl chasing him is neutralized and
Ranma is eternally grateful.
He realizes he wants to repay Hinako...
badly(yeah, I know... sounds a little like shoving, doesn't
it?).
Insert Hinako love scene. Ranma finds out it entire scenario was
a
setup after he's allowed to "partake" again. He realizes Akane
and
her sisters are extremely hentai and likes to see Ranma with
other
girls/women. Ranma bring's Hinako home, maybe not, and she finds out
the truth and doesn't mind. Insert Hinako/Tendo Sister scene. I'm
not really sure how this should end.
Oh I don't want to mess with
Hinako-chan too much so how can Hinako maintain her adult form for
most of the FanFic? (Finds she can absorb hentai energy just as
easily as battle energy? The dust increases her chi so that she can
maintain the form longer?) Also, I've got a problem with Hinako's
mentality: in the manga she maintains her child-like attitude while
in the Viz tapes she behaves like a solider (at least that's what
the Ranma Expanded Home-page says). Both attitudes are not exactly
compatible with the nypho one so how should I show the conversion?
And which of the two mentalities sould I use?
Pathetic, you say? Lame beyond belief and makes you
want to hurl? Well you can help make it better! Please send
your ideas, comments, suggestions, and desperately needed help
to Paladin@mars.superlink.net!