AAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
	I wasn't meant to post that!!!!!!!!!! AAAAAAAAAHHHHHH! I'm an 
idiot! Please, for anybody that hasn't read it yet, if you see 
a message from me that begins witha question about what's the
physical difference between RR and PR DO NOT READ! It contains
spoilers! *Isabel bangs her head on the keyboard several times
over*
	I'm so STUPID! 
	Sorry, I had to let that out. Still, I don't believe
I did that! 

	Isabel Arantes

Relax.  I read it, and you didn't give that much away.  You gave us a basic
plot line, no details - that's where the magic is.

Side thought : I would be interested in seeing if you could go back (when
you finish with all the betas) and add in more discriptions and details. 
It's a very good story, but it runs *REALLY* fast.  If you post the whole
thing as a completed story it will go too quick.  What you have now is
perfect for a cliff-hanger serial story (like they had back in the 30's and
40's).  Think about how you will flesh out things to slow down the pace a
bit.  Add some background detail of the buildings and rooms, maybe, people
and their expressions.  The way you describe things can help set or keep the
current mood.

AlberCrombie.
                                                                           
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