Hi Andy/Dodekain,

 Very touching fanfic, especially at the start of it. :) Just three things
 that strike me as a bit off.

thanks for the vote of confendence...:)

 1) the word wrapping. ;)

 yea, i know hmmmm....im working on it. this is my first time doing
this...sorry about it  :)
  

 2) what happened to akane?  It didn't appear to me that she was struck
	down in any way, perhaps divine intervention? 

you will find out in chapter 2

 3) I don't think Ranma would just kiss her like that, unless this fanfic
	is beginning in the middle or end of something and will do a flash
	back to a more intimate relationship where she gets poisoned with
	some time delayed drug of sorts... but that isn't it, is it? ^_^

well, as far as the kiss goes, in my opinion, he would kiss her under the
sitation....  :)

 Other than that, it's is nice... when I read it, I get a nice crisp picture
 of what's happening. Unfortunately, the happenings are kinda disjointed.

 Wing. [ Some people refer to me as Iczelion. hehe... ]

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