Hi Andy/Dodekain,

  Very touching fanfic, especially at the start of it. :) Just three things
  that strike me as a bit off.

  1) the word wrapping. ;)  
  2) what happened to akane?  It didn't appear to me that she was struck
	down in any way, perhaps divine intervention? 
  3) I don't think Ranma would just kiss her like that, unless this fanfic
	is beginning in the middle or end of something and will do a flash
	back to a more intimate relationship where she gets poisoned with
	some time delayed drug of sorts... but that isn't it, is it? ^_^

  Other than that, it's is nice... when I read it, I get a nice crisp picture
  of what's happening. Unfortunately, the happenings are kinda disjointed.

  Wing. [ Some people refer to me as Iczelion. hehe... ]

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