BTW folks, in this chapter you will run into <name>.  It appears because I 
couldn't come up with a good street name.  Help please.

um...how 'bout Drek.  Nice name for a dweezil.

Also the part dealing with "Land of illusions" should Tina sing mainly with the 
holograms doing the show, or should she dance live?

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Chapter 2:  2ND CONTACT PART 1

It was one of Priss and the Replicants nights off.  As a change of
pace Priss decided to be part of the audience instead of in front
of it.  Also she wanted to check out this new act that would be
playing some nights  and preceding hers on others.  While
confident no one could take her top billing at the Hot Legs club
until she was ready to leave, it didn't hurt to make sure.  This
group was called L. A. Tina, with the L and A pronounced
separately.  The bartender had caught some of their rehearsals.
"They do a lot of classic rock from the  1970's 80's and a few
90's stuff.  But  they put a new twists to them.  You probably
going to like them Priss."

maybe a little discription the place from Priss' point of view - she's
trying to be a watcher, so let's see what/how she sees.

(Touch and Go, Emerson Lake and Powell)
Again the keyboards sounded.  This time there was power and
some anger in the cords.

I would list all songs used in one spot at the beginning or end of the file.
Being nice to copyright type of thing.  Makes it easier to show you are not
trying to steal someone's stuff (and I'm not saying you are).

With the final cord the live band members and the hologram all
bowed in unison.

I like it.

Land of Illusions

 I don't get this line.

"Now folks we only got time for one more song.  The original
group was called "Bon Jovi" and the song is 'Wanted Dead or
Alive'.  The lights had dimmed.  The music started.  Louis synth
was now sounded like a standard guitar

This one bugs me - I didn't like the way the song was spaced with the story,
seemed awkward.  Too much song, then too much story, a little balancing
would help me.


Over all - a good scene.


and I can't comment on the cyber stuff - not my area of expertiece, I liked
it tho.

AlberCrombie

                                                                           
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