wrote   AlberCrombie ---- The One And Only Space Gopher           

um...how 'bout Drek.  Nice name for a dweezil.

Thats one suggestion!!  Thanks

maybe a little discription the place from Priss' point of view - she's
trying to be a watcher, so let's see what/how she sees.

A point for you

I would list all songs used in one spot at the beginning or end of the file.
Being nice to copyright type of thing.  Makes it easier to show you are not
trying to steal someone's stuff (and I'm not saying you are).

I thought putting the songs Names in order of her performance made more scence

Land of Illusions

I don't get this line.

Place holder, I haven't decided what they are going to be doing here, except
that
is the song that they will play.

This one bugs me - I didn't like the way the song was spaced with the story,
seemed awkward.  Too much song, then too much story, a little balancing
would help me.

That has been the hardest part for me, deciding how to show the song
and what they are doing on stage.

However, this song I feel is perfect for Tina, She is about to become
another thorn in Genom's side, and she is already inclinde to ally with
the Sabers (that's why she was watching them in chapter 1)

Over all - a good scene.

Thanks(Ego boost increasing, still well within safe limits)

and I can't comment on the cyber stuff - not my area of expertiece, I liked
it tho.

Yeah asked for suggestions for Nene's icon and combined the two I liked the
best.

I'll post chapter 3 in a few days