not bad, i could read more if i had to. a good Soum ( he was perfect ) the

stile is odd tho ( movie ), but what fun would stuff be if were all the same :)

no major problems. the ring part was too funny :)
my olny real complant: i dont know some of the Japaneese words you used,

you should write in english or add a dictonary at the end of the story for
us who still cant speek / understand the " good language ", k ? :)