Ranma 1/2: Reality Bites, Hard.
                          The Prologe
Dr. Tofu's clinic 5 minutes later.

We see Dr. Tofu sitting at his desk, reading a book titled "37
methods of drying ginseng root and how each effect acne."

[Crash, Shatter, Splat] - from the general area of the waiting room.

Dr Tofu Oh great!  Who is it this time?  I'd better have Genma get
        over here tomorrow.  I'll need it cleaned up before...

As he enters the waiting room he sees Ranma.  Nothing unsual there.
Landed on his face, again normal.  However what was not normal was that
while Ranma's right hand was in the proper "Please spirts, this is gonna
hurt" position.  His left arm was hanging limp.  Not good.  Moving closer
Tofu could see that Ranma was pale, _very_ pale. Then he saw the blood.

Ok, I tried to include only a small bit, but this should be enough.  You 
seem to be switching between a script style of writing and a prose 
style.  Go with the prose style.  I think it'll much better that way.  
Also, I think you're working the jokes too hard.  Above, you have a book 
titled "37 methods of drying ginseng root and how each affect acne"  
That's just too much to still be funny.  Try just making it simple.  
"The 37 Drying Methods of Ginseng, and How to Use Them"


Thom Youngblood | No matter where you go, there you are
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