[FFML] [Feedback] [Fanfic][Ranma][XOVER] Ranma Gets Glasses

Ok first of all this is my opinion. It comes from the view point of a reader. I do hope some of the good writers around here do offer comment on it. Second English is not my mother language so I might make mistakes either in spelling or comprehension of the text.
I feel this fic should have a WAFF (Warm And Fuzzy Feeling) tag. People in this story find strong, deep love and have a happy ending. I think, even if you are not into this kind of love, it deserves the tag.
On the same line of though, I would like to ask what the [XOVER] tag stands for. I do not recognise the series Ranma 1/2 is being crossed over with.

To me the transition to the lesbian relationships is a little too sudden. You could add a reference to little details that could, with the new frame of mind, be taken as a precedent of what was to come.

Upon the glasses, there is a little detail. Some people do need their glasses even if fighting such a large object as a person. They loose details of stance and body language. For this people there are special glasses. They look more like plastic goggles. The glasses are made of special plastic to be very hard to break. Even if they break they are made to break away from the eyes. I think, Ranma should get a pair of those for all the conflicts he is going to be.

On a general view, I like the story. Ranma, Akane, Shampuu, Ukio, and the rest come a little too mature. I wish life would be like that, to know exactly what you want, to get it, and to never have a doubt about it. That is more amazing than Ranma running more than a motorcycle. For that to happen, to 4 different girls, fighting for the same partner, now that is more amazing than the old g--, the revered great-great grandmother to walk on water. People a little greedy and selfish even if they are good people.

Thanks for the story.

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