Very little for me to comment on. Caught some things that've probably
already been found. Enjoyed the fight scene, and didn't find it chaotic
(at least no more than any such scene should be).
Jurgens went pale as he saw none other than Captain Japan boldly
standing at the end of the dock. Surrounding him were the rest of the
Avengers. Daredevil was there billowing sleeves were crossed across his
stomach, hands hidden inside their folds. Hawkeye stood poised with a
bow in hand, arrow notched. The monstrous Hulk was impossible to miss as
he crinkled his nose in disgust at the smell of raw fish. The new girl,
Tigra, looked like she wanted to do nothing so much as wrap herself
around Captain Japan. And there was the normal-sized Giant Man, hanging
toward the back of the group, as though not wishing to be seen.
Daredevil was there billowing sleeves were crossed across his stomach,
Daredevil was there, sleeves billowing across his stomach
He roared in her face, more beast than human. Still the Avenger pressed
on. She knew she would win eventually. She was the Goddess of Thunder
She wouldn�t have been too concerned save for one problem.
Missing a period.
> �I ain�t got no weakness!� Killer Shrike shouted, but sounded slightly
unsure of himself.
Rather than drawing closer, Killer Shrike aimed and touched his
gauntlets together, unleashing a maximum powered electrical discharge.
Is a line break missing there?
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