Subject: [FFML] Re: [FanFic][SM] NETTG - Terra in Tokyo Ch.1
From: "Benjamin A. Oliver" <boliver@email.arizona.edu>
Date: 4/15/2006, 6:32 PM
To: DB Sommer
CC: ffml@anifics.com

Quoting DB Sommer <sommert@connecttime.net>:

% ought to throw out a little something with what little time I have.

Wahoo!  Glad you're still reviewing stuff, DB!  I appreciate it.

 > Nuke 'Em 'Till They Glow!!
 > Terra in Tokyo

% Oh, this should be fun.

Just thought I'd name it after the worst Tenchi Muyo series ever just 
in case I
botched it. ^^

 > ---Chapter 1:  Just Plain Wrong
 >
 >     "Hiya, Mister Ander!  I see you finally got Mister Robinson to
give you your
 > pitchfork back.  Too bad it's jabbed into your chest, huh?  Okies, gotta
 > go--b'bye!"

% I see Johan from Monster has been through here. :)

Perhaps. :)

 >     If ignorance was bliss, Terra was the happiest girl in the whole
wide world.
 >

% Since Mihoshi didn't live on Earth, Terra's rank of happiest would
probably remain intact.

Yup.  Can't win against Mihoshi once she enters the competition, that's for
sure! XD

 >     "Haaai!"  Skipping along the way, the adolescent swung her book
bag back and
 > forth while singing, "Junior high!  Junior high!  I don't know why,
but it's...
 > junior high!"  She was so excited she hardly noticed when she knocked
down
 > another girl with her bag and trampled her badly before continuing on
her merry
 > way.

% Excel was quite irritated by the insensative girl's actions.

Some references are hard to miss, yes. :)

 >     "Hey!" Naru called after the girl who had run her over.  She got
back up,
 > dusted herself off, and sped after the whirling, skipping human
juggernaut. "Hold up!"

Terra, being a polite girl, decided to do as Naru ordered, pulling out a
gun and making Naru give her all her money.

Mwahahahahah!

 >     "Is she a cute boy?  Should I ask her out?"

% Yuri fans around the world vote: Yes

Alas, no yuri in this fanfic.  That I'm aware of.  You never know what I might
randomly have missed in the mad rush to finish the story.

 >     "Then once we find that problem, we'll BLOW IT TO BITS!!!"
 >
 >     "YEAH, BABY!"

% Amen

I mean, gotta blow stuff up all over the place.  Wouldn't be proper if we
didn't!

 >     "Oh," Haruna hesitated, "it seems that Terra is a foreigner, from
Ireland. Therefore, she does not understand how to speak properly to her
equals nor
 > superiors.

% Terra; Oh, I have neither, given my galaxy destroying powers. I could
eat Galactus for breakfast and wash him down with Metallia and Beryl.

Me, write an overpowered character?  Never! ^_^

Well.... I'd guess that all characters have to be overpowered in their 
own way,
at least initially.  Because if there's nothing all that interesting about
them, why bother following them?

Take Himura Kenshin, for example.  He's an overpowered swordsman to start with
and only gets balanced out by tougher villains later.

 >     "Because, take it from me, this hurts quite a lot."
 >
 >     The sweet little schoolgirl heard a harsh discord somewhere
between her eyes,
 > and then everything went black.

% Nice start. Will try to get to more later.

Right-o!  Thanks for the feedback and thanks for reading! :D

--
Benjamin A Oliver
boliver@email.arizona.edu

Second-Year Management Information Systems Graduate Student
Eller College of Management
University of Arizona

Writings: Fan Fiction
http://boliver.florestica.com/

Webcomic: Nuke 'Em 'Till They Glow!! The Early Years
http://nettg.com


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