Subject: [FFML] Re: [Kingdom Hearts/CCS/Lots][Dark] Unsung 2.1 - "Refugees"
From: Jon Rosebaugh
Date: 5/25/2005, 3:35 PM
To: Steven Scott
CC: ffml <ffml@anifics.com>


Steven Scott wrote:
 "Yeh, eru'oy ekawa!" he said, but Sakura didn't understand him.
It sounded like English, and she didn't know much of that.  He stepped
into the room, and said something else.  "Driew emutsoc.  Era uoy a
Repus?"

It wasn't until the end of the chapter that I figured out you were just 
spelling things backwards. I understand that you want to represent 
foreignness, but that's hardly the way to go about it, because what Dash 
is saying here _doesn't_ sound like English. Try instead spelling it out 
phonetically... "Hay, uuure awek!" or some such. That will present some 
foreignness, without being just plain weird.

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