I'm a week behind on these, so let's get on with it. As before, I pulled this
copy off the web site. Also, there are spoilers for the end of the story below,
so anyone out there who hasn't read it should go do so now.

Akane would remember the days they spent waiting for the
Reikoku to come as some of the best time she ever shared
with Ranma.

AKANE: So the rest of our days won't be as good? Gee, thanks.

RANMA: Hey, at least we now know *you* won't be getting killed.

"Is Chinese medicine practice. Called 'Chi-Kung.'" She

Sounds like it's from the Martial Arts Cash Register school. She ought to teach
it to Nabs :)

"Most Amazon techniques like that," Shampoo explained. She
held up a single finger: "First there is basic
application," she then opened both her hands to spread the
rest of her fingers wide, "then you learn much more from

I think the punctuation is off here.

application." She then opened both her hands to spread the
rest of her fingers wide. "Then you learn much more from

(or)

application," she said, and then opened both her hands to spread the
rest of her fingers wide, "then you learn much more from

They also proved an antidote to the Reikoku's slime-
tentacles. The caustic goop froze solid on contact, then
shattered an instant later as Ranma raked through with his
feline claws. He struck out with both hands and feet,
sprouting Talons of Ice from his toes as well. Soon, he had
defeated the all four of the thrashing acid arms.

defeated all four of the

"HAPPO GO-EN-SATSU!"

Since you use the extra-u romanization (e.g. Ryouga), shouldn't that be HAPPOU?

Also, should Ryoga be the one to think of this? I don't think he's ever even met
Hinako, while Ukyo and Akane were in her class and even Shamps played basketball
against her.

<Aw... to hell with it,> he thought in disgust. <I don't
send monsters out to do my dirty work. Yo, Reikoku?>

The three sigils glowed in silent response.

<Get lost.>

And just like that, the crimson lights vanished, leaving
him in the lightless void once again.

I wonder if he wouldn't add "And next time those priestesses call you, don't
come!" and whether it would work if he did. I suppose he just didn't think of
it.

I'm glad our heroes didn't escape with no casualties. Ranma's blindness helps
keep the dramatic weight of the story while opening up more possibilities for
his growth.

It's been a long, strange trip, with many obstacles and
Delays, but we've finally made it. My profound thanks to

I think you want a lower-case "d" there, unless this is some political in-joke.

SECRETARY: Excuse me, Congressman. There's a Mr. Reikoku here who says he wants
to see the House Majority leader.

DELAY: Eep. Did I mention that I'm stepping down effective immediately? In fact,
I and twenty of my colleagues have just become Democrats. Please show Mr.
Reikoku to Ms. Pelosi's office. *sweatdrop*

all who have supported me in writing this story. Special
thanks to Gary Kleppe, who has been the most consistent
source of helpful C&C.

Been a pleasure. I think this go down as my favorite *finished* Ranma fic of all
time.






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