Here's a coulple of things i picked up with a spellchecker...

The younger of the two, dressed in a a slightly worn gi, returned to
his feet swiftly, launching an assault on the older man.

dressed in a slightly worn gi

"What's the point? You said you couldn't read chinese!"

Chinese

Two swift kicks to the head later, the father dropped to his knees in
a daze and the pamphlet into the Ranma's eagerly waiting hands. Genma
was about to teach his son a lesson about ignoring a downed opponent
when his son spoke up, "Pop, doesn't that mean 'Training Ground'"?

Okay, so I guess Ranma knows a little Chinese...

Grabbing the pamphlet that was being shoved into his face, Genma rose
to his feet in an instant. "Son, I think maybe we should check out
this Jusenkyo."

And so does Genma, apparently.

Nabikie turned towards her sister, "It's you own fault, you know, Miss

Nabiki

"You get what you deserve.. That's for last friday."

Friday

"That's what they said but," Touji nodded over at the retreating form.
"His father is the principle. Add that to him being on all the sports
teams, and he does whatever he wants. Don't mess with Shinji Ikari,
it's not healthy."

suggest

"That's what they said but", Touji nodded over at the retreating form.
"His father is the principal. If you add that to him being on all the sports
teams, he ends up doing whatever he wants. Don't mess with Shinji Ikari,
it's not healthy."

"Kinda boring without him here, aint it?"

"isn't"?

For the life of me I don't know when this was written... It was a
while ago though, and after cleaning it up a bit, I've decided to post
it and see what people think. I know it seems extremely fragmented,
but it's a prelude, I'm just introducing who will be the main
characters. Should I continue? Any C&C is appreciated.

P-R-P-Chan

Should you continue?

Dude, you haven't gotten started yet, "Not Continue" shouldn't even be an 
option. I don't know enough of the story to deceide if it's worth reading or 
not.

So far it seems to be a few series crossed-over into a AU, with some of the 
characters OOC for some yet to be discovered reason. What's the story about? 
What roles do the characters play? I'm assuming that the purpose of this 
Prelude was not merely to let us know this is a Ranma-Evangelion-Oh My 
Goddess! X-over, so, how will the characters' current settings affect the 
outcome of the story?

Hell, why is the story called "Vitual Insanity", anyway?

Let us know soon, ok?

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