Nugar wrote:

$About time I got to this, though wasn't there a chapter one of act 2?

Yep. It's at:

http://www.rakhal.com/florestica/d_b_sommer/avenging/avenging201.htm

My email's been so screwed up lately I have no record of it,

It's from a year or more ago.

Manabu and Kobashi exited the bar, feeling pretty damn good about
themselves as they leaned against one another in a drunken stupor. They
sang loudly and off key, causing passersby to give them a wide berth
rather than having their ears assailed in such a painful way. Likewise,
the men�s reputation as members of one of the most violent local street
gangs meant no one would tell them to keep it down.

$The tough guy image was ruined by their choice of songs,
unfortunately.  While some exceptionally tough guys probably could pull
of 'The wind beneath my wings' in a bad engrish striesand voice, these
guys were a few superpowers short of that lofty goal.

Hehehehe. Nice one.

Kobashi nodded. �There were only two things that could have made the day
more special.�

$Manabu: Hot gay sex?
Kobashi: You read my mind.

No. Only did yaoi once. And a yaoiish scene. A couple of times. Okay, I've 
done some.

�Maybe it�ll be some rich tourists that got lost,� Kobashi said.

�We�ll help them with directions.� Manabu fingered the knife tucked in
his belt. Hidden as it was underneath his shirt, he had used it to great
effect in times past.

$Mmm, that sentance is awkward.  The 'beneath his shirt' bit doesn't go
with the use in the past bit.

used most of your grammar comments, like this

Wielding a sharp knife tended to make people see
things your way, especially when it came to economic redistribution.
Kobashi was very much in favor of that, and cutting out the government
as a middleman in the process.

$Ah, a neo liberal.

Pretty much.

As they drew close enough to make out the figure, both men came to an
looks. She wore a tight green and black body hugging, off-the-shoulder
outfit. The cut was low at the top, showing off a scandalous amount of
bosom, and high at the hem, showing off her long, black stocking clad

$stocking-clad    ?  I'm actually unsure on the proper use of hyphens in
situations like this.

yeah, added a lot of hyphens

The woman was such a beauty she stopped both men in their tracks. Each
of them felt an animalistic urge deep in their souls as they stared at
her. It took them several seconds to recover their wits.

�What do you know, it is a tourist,� Kobashi said.

$Extra planar tourists tend to be a few degrees tougher than the
ordinary sort.

True

Manabu took the lead. �Pardon me, my dear, I can�t help but noticing you
appear lost. Well, luck is with you today. My friend and I happen to be
with the local tourist committee. And we�d be more than happy to show
you all the local attractions.�

$Too bad she is the local attraction.

Heh. Well, too bad for them

Kobashi picked up where his friend left off. �In fact, this section of
Tokyo is famous for its beds. And it just so happens there�s a hotel
nearby which has some of the best in the city. Why don�t you follow us
and we�ll show you how comfy they are?� He shot her a toothy grin, one
that showed refusing their �hospitality� was not an option.

$Theoretically, though doubtful.  She could probably cancel a magazine
subscription and get a refund on her credit card.

Thankfully I've never tried to do that one. I doubt I'd like the results

The woman spoke in a throaty purr. �I see thou hast impeccable taste
when it comes to beauty. However, there is but one of myself and two of
thee. Perhaps it would behoove thee to discuss amongst thyselves who is
the more worthy of my attentions.�

$Though obviously she's messing with their heads, a smart man would
realize he'd better have a tag team behind him to even attempt to keep
up with her.

Heh. I doubt even that would help at this point.

The sheer ferocity of their attacks ended the fight in less than a
minute. Kobashi, the larger of the two, landed a hard right hook that
laid out Manabu flat. He stood over the fallen man, eyes glazed as he
waited for him to rise, but Manabu merely lay there, one arm bent at an
odd angle.

$Dead?  Or just unconscious?

Unconscious. He's got to serve to introduce the Executioner.

With the kiss delivered, she slipped out of his grasp and admired her
handiwork. �Truly thou should be grateful, for after one kiss from Urd,
the Enchantress, thy mortal life would be meaningless from that point
onward. Now thou can enjoy the moment for the rest of eternity.�

$Poor guy.  I'd've held out for  blow job at least.

Heh

Urd laughed to herself as she strode from the alley, leaving the statue
of Wataru Kobashi behind.

$A little meaner than the one we know and love.  Though she is fused
with something, my knowledge of superheroes and villains is sorely
lacking, so the nuances of this performance escape me.

It's to establish Urd's quite nasty and manipulative here.

cities were larger than ever, mortals seemed to be spilling out
everywhere, and all beneath her feet was paved in some sort of gray, and
decidedly bland, stone. Why they did not pave their streets in gold,
like the Realm Eternal, mystified her.

$Sure, they're paved in gold, but have you ever tried to drive,
skateboard, or roller blade on them?  Or hell, even walk if you're not
possessed of supernatural balance and grace?  Them suckers is slick!

Heh

Even the air was more foul than
before. A pox upon the thing they called technology.

$Skuld wouldn't appreciate that.

No, but she is out of earshot, so Urd cares little

It was beyond her
why the fools didn�t simply embrace magic. Well, they did have but puny
mortal minds that could never hope to rival the intricacies of an
Asgardian's. And they did have very little time before they turned old
and died. It made her wonder why they bothered doing anything at all,
since their lives ended practically before they began.

$Pretty much always time to get laid a few times, first, though, so why 
not?

To an immortal, it's like 'Eh.' :)

Still, mortals occasionally amused her, so they could be useful given
the proper circumstances. She would use some now to help her achieve her
mission in coming to Midgard. For one thing, she needed to acquire
suitable transportation for one befitting her beauty and stature. It was
time to see what the mortals had to offer.

$In japan?  Commonly?  Either a wide selection of two-four seater little
economy minded jellybean cars, or a scooter.

She has something more elaborate in mind. She'll improvise.

Within minutes she arrived at her destination. She took minor note of
the sign of the establishment, �Hoshikawa�s Gym.�. She entered boldly,
as though she owned the place. Despite its edifice, it was not large,

$Heh, nice choice of words.  Very archaic.

Thanks.

hope to match even an Asgardian grandmother, their efforts provided many
of them with aesthetic physiques. She briefly considered making a half
dozen of them her playthings before recalling her purpose on Midgard.

$Wonder if this Urd is rough with her toys.

She doesn't break them as a general rule. Maybe in the hentai version of 
this. Then again, maybe not.

minds was as effective now as it had been in the past. She could not
fault them, though. Asgardian men were little better. It seemed all men
were driven by their loins rather than their minds.

$Yup.  He steers, I push.

HA! Nice one.

Much to Chiyoko�s surprise, the manager, who generally treated everyone
in high-handed fashion, all but groveled as he bowed apologetically to
the woman. �We have none of those currently in stock, Mistress.�

$Actually, it took me a second to twig on the term 'litter', I'm kinda
surprised he got it so quick.  Not something most people ask for.

True, but we saved ourselves some time by him knowing what it is right off.

The woman crinkled her nose in disgust. �Very well. I shall improvise.
It is to mine understanding that this area of Midgard has a reputation
for magnificent bedding.

$Snerk.  Cute.

Thanks. I like it when I can tie in earlier scenes to later ones.

�Truly this is a most comfortable way of being borne. Perhaps mortals
have made some improvements over the centuries,� she said.

$Yeah, it's big and flashy, but the gas mileage sucks, and I bet she
never even takes it off road.

She can just get new men if she so desires, so spare are readily available.

The woman nodded in satisfaction and exited the store, the men carrying
the bed on their shoulders.

Chiyoko waited until they were out of sight before calling the police
and informing them that a super villain had just looted her furniture
store.

$You'd have thought she'd have realised that before hand and kept her
mouth shut the entire time.

Nope. She was uncertain of what was going on up until that point. 
Superheroes and villains aren't an everyday occurance yet.

�Yeah, we know how to deal with pretty ladies. We can have her eating
out of our hands in a matter of minutes,� Kyo seconded.

$Then from the stumps of their wrists, the bend of their elbows, the
curve of their necks...

Nah. No cannibalistic fics for me.

It might free them, or it could cause some sort of psychic backlash and
send them into comas, if not killing them outright. Or they might go
insane and start attacking everything that moved. There was no other way
to incapacitate her, not with Kaori�s own men shielding the villainess

>from attack. Kaori had no choice but to stand aside and let the group 

pass.

$At least she's displayed some sense.

She's not dumb. Just agitated.

Having this high-handed bitch seize control of her men was more than
Kaori could bear. Something had to be done and stop super-villains like
her, and those holier than thou heroes. Anything. No measure would be
too extreme to control them. She vowed that as soon as the current
crisis was over, she�d be phoning her Uncle Peter in the United States.
He dealt with SPBs all the time on behalf of the government. He�d tell
her what to do to bring this scum, human and mutant alike, into line.

$Heh.  I seriously wonder why the JDF doesn't already have something
like the sentienals in this world, given the obvious giant robo fetish.

The upsurge in superpowered beings is recent. They might take action at some 
point, though. *Hint Hint*

Another tremor of nervousness shook Ukyou, and this time the source
wasn�t the nearness of her target. It was the outfit she wore. Since her
last school was boys only, she had disguised herself as one. It was
surprisingly easy, with no one ever catching on to her true gender. Her
experience was one of the inspirations for pretending to be a male
superhero. No one would ever connect the girl Ukyou Kuonji with the
masculine archer. It was a stroke of genius on her part. Who ever heard
of a cross-dressing superhero? It simply wasn�t done.

$Is pretty clever, actually.

I thought so.

supposed to do things like that. It was odd. Going to an all guy�s
school meant one could grab or scratch themselves just about anywhere.
No one cared. Guys did it all the time. Why should tugging at her bra
through her blouse be any different?

$I've never minded.

I don't want to know.

�This femininity stuff sucks,� Ukyou mumbled as she entered the school.
Once she accomplished her mission, perhaps she would transfer to another
all guy�s school and not worry about dresses, pantyhose, shaving her
legs, or the worst of all, make up.

$While she does have a point, she's also got more issues than a five
year subscription to Cosmo.

Heh

�And I�m telling you he was turned to stone!�

$A kiss from Urd lasts longer than a bottle of Cialis.

For eternity, all right.

After recovering in the alley, and waking up beneath a statue that
looked exactly like Kobashi, it didn�t take long for Manabu to figure
out something horrible had happened.

$Ah, lucky guy to lose, then.

Not for long.

When horrible things happened to
Manabu, the first thing he would do was have horrible things happen
right back to the cause of the problem, usually multiplied several times
over. He had every intention of disposing of that attractive foreigner
who had messed with his mind and turned his best friend into stone.
After he was done using her to slake his lust, of course. He�d do it in
the name of Kobashi.

$It takes a true friend to hit it in your memory.

Yep.

Not that he was foolish enough to confront the woman alone. He could
probably take her now, since he was prepared for her tricks, but it was
foolish to take pointless chances. That meant getting the rest of the
gang together to help him out under the pretence of seeking revenge for
their fallen comrade. Unfortunately, no one believed his story. It
hadn�t helped that he had initially claimed that �Some woman had gotten
Kobashi stoned�. It took Manabu nearly ten minutes to make it clear what
being �stoned� meant.

$Heheh.

Thanks. That was one that occurred to me at the spur of the moment.

The guys looked skeptically at one another. �How do we know you didn�t
just have a statue of Kobashi made as some sort of gag?� one asked.

Manabu shot him an irritated stare. �Of course, you�re absolutely right.
I must have contacted a local stone mason and paid him a huge sum of
money to make a life-size statue of Kobashi just to pull a gag on you.�

$Occams razor and all.  I would have been inclined to believe him.

Heh

Manabu laughed. �What the hell are you supposed to do with that? Croquet
us to death?� The others joined in the laughter.

$She'll squish you like a bug!

Ha! NIce one.

Ukyou was in the middle of the one involving rope, a chair, and a
feather duster,

$Bah, that one's boring.  Rope and chair is alright, but you really need
something more than a featherduster.  Unless it's a tazer with a feather
duster strapped to it.  That'd be fun.

I leave it up to the reader's imagination what form the vengeance would 
take.

when she heard the teacher call her name. She banished
the fantasy, primped her hair one last time, took a deep, calming
breath, and wore her most charming smile as she slid the door open and
entered the room.

$It's funny, though.  I hadn't even realized during the earlier bits of
avenging that this scene hadn't happened yet, and that I was actually
going to happen.

Yep. And here it is in all of its wonderful glory.

As she strode to the teacher�s side, Ukyou shut out most of the
teacher�s introduction and let her eyes pore over the seated students.
Now that she was about to have her vengeance, a hole appeared in her
plan. She hadn�t seen Ranma in ten years. How much had he changed? Was
he short or tall? Had he put on weight, or was he skinny? Was he
bishonen or built like a fireplug? Would she even recognize him if he
didn�t recoil in fear at the very sight of her? She couldn�t begin her
campaign with a �Are you Ranma Saotome?� What sort of person could claim
they were on a righteous crusade if they didn�t even recognize their
intended target?

$Shampoo, Kuno, herself, Ryoga...  Pretty much most of the cast and one
shots.

Well... yeah, I guess so.

The boy continued. �Yeah, we met at what-his-name�s party. We talked a
little bit near the pool. I had to leave in a hurry, but never did get
your name and number. How about giving it now?�

$Hehehe.  That's cute.

Another thing that came to me at the spur of the moment. It seems to have 
worked since no one saw it coming.

�Huh?� Was all Ukyou could get out.

A boy next to him said, �Sit down, Daisuke. You always try to use that
pick up line on new girls and it never works.�

$Yeah, since Hiroshi keeps screwing it up for him.

It is a pretty bad pick up line, though.

torso indicated he underwent a rigorous training regimen to stay fit.
Even from across the room, Ukyou could sense the hidden strength under
his school uniform. It reminded her of Captain Japan, except she knew
this guy was a total jerk while the Captain was an icon of manhood that
any woman would be lucky to land. A faint blush rose to her cheeks as
she envisioned her hunky teammate.

$Yeah, you keep doing this.

Steve Rogers had much the same effect on the ladies. And he was a goodie two 
shoes, too.

�No, I�m pretty sure he controls hawks,� the first person said.

$Heh, I think Akane would know better.  Not that she could ever admit it.

Exactly.

Ukyou gulped. Ranma was acting way too casual, and getting her into
trouble without even knowing it. She giggled girlishly and tried to
sound flighty. �Don�t be silly. You�re misremembering. I was a terrible
shot and haven�t touched a bow since I was kid.�

$Ranma: Still a terrible liar, too, huh?

Ranma's not good at lying either, the bad poker face and everything.

It was a light push, intended only to move the girl back down in her
seat. However, in a display of complete lack of coordination, the girl
collapsed against the chair, hitting her back against it before landing
hard on the floor.

$Clumsy bitch.

What a cold man you are, like me. :)

Ukyou was taken aback by the universal looks of anger shot toward her.
It was only a simple fall, one Ukyou hadn�t even intended. While she
could understand some disapproval from the class, the irate glares she
shot her way made it seem like she had strangled a rabbit before their
eyes.

$No, no, most people are shocked by that one, not mad.  I mean, you tell
people you can kill a rabbit with your thumb, and they don't beleive
you.  Then you grab the bunny head, put a thumb at the base of the head,
and give it that characteristic bend/push, and they freak out.

Ukyou has little experience in such. So do I, for that matter.

gnarled wooden stick that was obviously some sort of cane. A couple of
other students helped the fallen girl to her feet, and Ukyou could see
she placed most of her weight on one leg.

It was the worst.

$Social suicide right there, for sure.

Yep

Ukyou was quick to take advantage of the opening. �Oh, look, something
important is happening outside. Why doesn�t everyone go to the window
and see what it is?� She walked over to the window, praying it was
something on the level of an alien invasion. Anything to distract the
class from what had just happened.

$Next day:  Hey, you're the bitch that beat up Akane!  Let's get her!
Ukyo: Oh, hell.

Heh. That would be about the size of it, too.

She was close. Even Ukyou was taken aback by the sight of a mob of over

�Come down and play,� the guys in the room said, beatific expressions on
all of their faces. As one they turned away from the window and headed
toward the door. Within seconds the room was devoid of anything
containing a Y chromosome.

$Heh, I had a mental image of a wad of, ah, soiled, tissue in a trashcan
in some boy's bedroom somewhere, lurching and bump/sliding its way
across the floor in her direction.

Yeck. Even I didn't think of that one. And I'd rather I didn't. :)

The girl jerked, as though she had been slapped. Slowly she said,
�Because she said her name is the Enchantress. So I just figured she
enchants things. And since she was only surrounded by guys, and none of
us girls were affected, I assumed that�s what she does.�

$No lesbians?

Nope, and it affect gay men.

�That makes sense.� Ukyou�s hand curled into a fist. �I�m going to have
to�� She paused. She was about to say she was going down there to kick
the Enchantress� aging backside. She might as well admit she was Hawkeye
while she was at it. Instead she said, �I�m going to find somewhere safe
to hide, since there�s no way a normal girl like me can take on some
supervillain.� Accepting the damage to her reputation in the name of
preserving her secret identity, Ukyou ran away, hoping to find a quiet
spot to change into her alter ego. While she started her search, she hit
the emergency beacon on her Avengers ID card. The team would be alerted
to the danger and be able to home in on her position. While she hoped
she could take out the bimbo without any help, she wasn�t taking any
chances. Better to have too much firepower on a false alarm, like their
confrontation with Leap Frog (whose sole power was bouncing around on a
pair of springs in his frog costume)

$While incredibly lame, and a bad character design, those
supervillian/heros do make many of the people who read those comics feel
better.  I mean, after reading about 'Leap Frog', you kinda feel better
about running around in your superman underoos with a towel around your
shoulders.

It would, yeah.

satisfied with the final product. With improvements to the technology,
she would only be sacrificing a little strength and protection for a
great deal more speed and quickness. And she was taking the opportunity
to install a host of newer, more powerful weapons that would only make
her more dangerous. The Hulk wouldn�t be calling her a stove person
anymore. Now she would actually look like a woman in armor, instead of a
walking tin can.

$But wouldn't she keep the old suit as is?  I mean, hell, you don't
rebuild the original unit from scratch, you either modifiy the original
or you build from scratch.

She had to use some parts in the interim. She co-built the original, and 
needed to look over the old again as well to make sure everything was right

complained about how long it took their eldest sister to bathe, she
wouldn�t be able to help until after the situation had been resolved.

Xxxxxxxxxxxxx

$Damned scene break!  We want details!  Details, man, details!

Not here. Maybe in a Realities lemon or something.

Mousse stopped �reading� the Braille law books he was perusing for an
upcoming test and temporarily turned off the audio signal on his card.
He wasn�t wild about this whole Avengers thing. He didn�t care much for
the company of others and certainly didn�t need them, regardless of what
that old ghoul, Stick might think. But he was committed to helping
others, and serving as an Avenger met that goal in ways that swinging

>from building to building could never do.

Rather than moving, he sat and pondered the matter.

$Sheesh.  What a dick.

Yep. But he'll come through. He's still wary about everything. DOn't want to 
end all conflict at this point.

xxxxxxxxxxxx

Ranma was too busy being enchanted to answer the call, though he was on
the scene, just not in the role that Hawkeye had hoped for.

$All that careful teamwork, shot to hell.

The problem with being young and having double lives

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

The Hulk was too busy fighting Spragg, the Living Hill --a member of an
alien race whose forms were identical large mounds of dirt-- preventing
the large knoll from spearheading an invasion of Earth. He had no time
to answer a second call to battle.

$Not that he could find his way there.

That too

�I don�t like girls!� Akane shouted.

�No one said you did,� Yuka, who was at Akane�s right, told her.

Sayuri, who was to Akane�s left, said, �Yeah, though I wonder if her
power extends to lesbians.�

$Just what I was thinking.

Hentai. Although I thought to mention it, so I must be too. :)

radiating magic. Since getting rid of the source of Akane�s power was
not an option that meant changing into Thor and confronting the goddess
before she �outed� Akane for something a whole lot worse than
lesbianism. Not that she was a lesbian, no matter how confused her
memories seemed to get when she was Thor.

$Kinda hard keeping your memories straight as a girl when you look at
another goddess and remember exactly how you hit that, and how many times.

Yep. As I aluded to earlier and here. She has issues

Unable to transport directly to his side, Urd settled on creating a
disturbance that was certain to draw his attention. Curiously, he still
had not made an appearance. Surely he would come to her. He had to be
lonely, trapped as he was in this world of lowly mortals. It wasn�t like
any other Asgardians would dare defy the All-Father�s Imperial Edict.

$That's the one saying not to interfere on earth, right?

Interfering in Thor's life, actually

concoction. It took another year to weave the proper enchantments to
make it work. but it had been worth the sacrifice. The mixture was so
powerful that no man but Odin himself would be able to resist its
effects. One kiss, and Thor would be hers for the next thousand years.

$Smoochy.

Wouldn't take much to market it, though.

Urd was careful as she rubbed the substance on her lips. There was only
enough for one application, so she had to be certain to use it under the
right conditions. There would be no second chances.

$Ah, a one shot, or at least very rare, villainess.

Yep. At the moment, this was her one appearance. There will be more villains 
to make up in her absense, though.

�I don�t think so,� Hawkeye scoffed. She nocked an arrow and aimed it at
the Enchantress. �I�m only going to tell you once, release all of these
guys from whatever hold you have on them and give up. And don�t make any
sudden moves. Aside from making me nervous, you�re liable to fall out of
that top.�

$Heheh.

Thanks. I'm glad someone caught that. I was afraid it was too subtle, or 
unfunny. I thought it good, myself.

The archer saw what she needed in the highest tree in the courtyard, the
tree standing only a handful of meters to her left. Right before the mob
was upon her, she shot a cable arrow into the highest branch that could
support her weight. The miniaturized motor pulled her up faster than she
could possible manage on her own, taking her up to the branch and to the
relative safety of the tree. The best her foes could manage now was to
climb the tree, where she could fend them off with her hand-to-hand
skills, or alternately club them in the head with her bow, should she
run out of arrows.

$Archers who try to club people with bows deserve their slaughter at the
hands and short range weapons of a real fighter.

She is desperate and outnumber. I think she can be cut a break.

Now there was a space around the figure and Urd got her first look at
him. He wore a loose red robe with voluminous sleeves and a demon�s mask
with two tiny horns at the brow over his face. A pair of overlapping
letter �D�s were on his chest. Currently his hands were tucked into his
sleeves, making it appear as though he had only one semi-circular arm.

$Bout time he showed up.  Angst on your own time, when that beeper goes
of it's time to save the world.

He will. Or at least save a local school and gym full of guys.

Just as the figure was nearly upon him, Daredevil finally managed to
sort out his foe�s heartbeat from the others. The hero�s defenses
momentarily went down as he recognized the familiar pulse of Captain
Japan�s.

$But since he's nominally blind, he can't tell that he's not in
costume.  That's cute.

Yeah.

A hard right struck cleanly, nearly breaking Daredevil�s jaw and sending

Daredevil began wearing down his foe with a methodical attack that
systematically destroyed Captain Japan�s defenses. Instead of feeling
elation at kicking his nominal rival�s butt, the blind adventurer felt
empty and hollow. Defeating the Captain under these conditions was
pointless. It didn�t prove anything other than he made a poor puppet.

$I think most people would fight worse than they usually do if they have
a metaphysical hand up their ass guiding their moves.

Urd's magic is good. It only affect a person's perceptions slightly.

In response, Daredevil drew back his fist and punched her in the face.

$That's not going to go over well.

No, no it's not

To a normal woman of Urd�s proportions, the blow would have rendered her
stunned, if not unconscious. To an Asgardian in the fit shape she was
in, it simply turned her head. Her shock was total as she remained
looking away, saying softly, �Thou didst strike mine face.�

$Sheesh.  Dialogue like that would get on my nerves really quickly.

And it'll be repeated.

�Cease thy foolish ranting, Urd.�

$Heh.

Thanks

The Enchantress looked into the mirror�s surface. �Magic Mirror, I
command thee to speak. Have I lost mine beauty?�

The face of a handsome man with blond hair and eyes of the deepest blue
appeared on the surface. It proclaimed, �Honey, I�d like to strip you
naked, smear you in honey, and lick��

$Heheheh.  Now that's funny.

He's a very hentai magic mirror

�Enow.� Urd silenced the mirror and replaced it in the hole. �Thor,
surely thou dost not find my form repellent.�
The Executioner leveled the hammer in Thor�s direction. �So, I see mine
fears were well founded. Thou has conspired to take mine elder sister

>from Asgard and make her yours.�

$She's still nuts, though.

Heh

The accusation made Thor stare at her fellow Asgardian in disbelief.
�Surely thou art joking.�

�I would never joke when it comes to mine sibling!� the Executioner�s
hollow, metallic voice bellowed. �And refer to me by my proper title:
The Executioner.�

Thor�s eyes narrowed. �Thou still goes by that ridiculous title? Skuld,
there be no such position in all of Asgard. The All-Father doth not
execute anyone. He satisfies justice by exiling criminals to distant,
malicious lands.� That probably wasn�t the best of recourses, since some
exiles not only survived those harsh realms, but they would found their
own kingdoms in those places of exile, and then raised armies to seek
revenge on Asgard. While Asgard always won, there was usually a feeling
of irritation when some criminal turned their punishment to their
advantage.

$That feeling of irritation was far overweighed by the sense of
accomplishment they had in kicking their enemies ass, AGAIN, which was
why Odin did that.

COuld be. :)

�Od�s Blood!� Thor exclaimed as she backed away from her foe.

$Who's Od?

Don't know, but Thor says it an awful lot in the comics.

The Executioner didn�t seem surprised in the slightest. �Foolish Thunder
God, I have improved mine hammer much since our last encounter. No cheap
victory shall thou attain this time. Rather, at long last the name of
Skuld shall be on everyone�s lips as the greatest of gods, while the
Thunder�s name will be quickly forgotten, like some god I cannot name,
since they be forgotten.�

$She has a point.

I thought so too. It's hard to site things you forgot since you forget them.

�Mine name is legend, and shall be until the end of days,� Thor promised.

$I am reminded by the old Secret of Monkey Island retort to that.
Insult: My name is feared far and wide by all who have heard it!
Retort: Too bad no one's ever heard of YOU at all.

Heh. Don't know that one, but it's amusing.

Skuld stared down at the charred remains of the handle, all that was
left of five years of intense work. �Thou art a jerk!�

$Heh!

He is, too, from her perspective.

A girl fell out of the hole in the bottom of the armor, landing solidly
on her behind.

$Yeah, we all saw that one coming.

When there was no head, that should have been the giveawya

�What the hell?� Hawkeye said, mostly to herself.

The girl, who appeared to be in her early teens, rose to her feet. Her
hair was long and raven black, and fell to nearly her bottom. She wore a
loose white and red outfit, feminine, but something a child would wear.
Blue markings were on her forehead and cheeks. She pouted, highlighting
her youthful appearance.

�Thou art a meanie!�

$Cute insults.

She's a kid at heart. A brat, but a kid.

painfully beautiful woman who should have been at the sisters� sides.
Her beauty wasn�t merely physical in nature, like Urd�s, rather it was
an aura of serenity that could only be divine in origin. A tear welled
in Thor�s eyes as a name attached itself to the face. �Belldandy.� The
word was closer to being breathed rather than spoken. She turned to Urd.
�Where is Belldandy?�

$She's been reborn as a mortal, though she knowest it not, and now goes
by the name Wasp-girl...

No.

Urd turned contemptuously away from the fallen goddess. �This game
ceases to amuse me. If thou doth wish to spurn mine advances and remain
on Midgard then by all means, enjoy thy banishment. Thou shalt find it
more curse than blessing. There can be no other outcome when dealing
with mortals.�

$I guess she is around somewhere, or something.

More on it later, of course. I wouldn't just throw out something like that 
without it being a plot point.

appear in the mainstream universe decades later in the second She Hulk
series. Yes, Leap Frog was a horrible Daredevil villain as well. A guy
in a frog constume with springs in the feet. At least they made him a
comedy character later in life.

$Marvel has certainly produced some winners.  Though you have to wonder
what Dark Horse was thinking much of the time, too.

True

Well, that was kinda cute, mostly sad.  Definitely a downswing in the
mood at the end, and that's a little jarring.

There's some seriousness in here too. It's a mix, though an emphasis on 
humor a lot of the time.

Technically it was clean,

with the most common mistake I noticed being left out quote marks.  You
must have been typing pretty fast.  Good chapter.  What happened to
chapter one of this act, though?  I certainly can't find/don't remember
it.

Mentioned early on now

Ah, I see you've got a new chapter out.  I'll get to it.

And I appreciated that as well


Thanks for the extensive comments. They are very appreciated.

Yay! I'm all caught up, and before bed time, too. :)

Thanks again for all the help.

DB Sommer 



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