Suggested changes: {before : after}
Sorry for the long delay. I've been working through the back issues of
some other stories and just got around to new reading again.
On 03/24/2005 10:59 PM, DB Sommer said:
Manabu and Kobashi exited the bar, feeling pretty damn good about
themselves as they leaned against one another in a drunken stupor.
They sang loudly and off key, causing passersby to give them a wide
berth rather than having their ears assailed in such a painful way.
Likewise, the men's reputation as members of one of the most violent
local street gangs meant no one would tell them to keep it down. The
men might meet the request halfway by ripping the person's ear off so
they wouldn't have to hear the racket.
What could be more fair? :}b
The Enchantress' arrival made everyone stop in their tracks. She
noted that the mortal men stared at her in lust while the mortal
harridans shot her venomous stares. {Amidration : Admiration} and
{Envy : envy} for one who was beauty personified. All was as it
should be. In some ways, men and women, whether they be mortal or
immortal, were alike.
Chiyoko waited until they were out of sight before calling the police
and informing them that a super villain had just looted her
furniture store. Immediately afterwards, she called Akemi Shutaro at
Channel 6. Her fifteen minutes of fame had come, and she was going to
milk it for all it was worth.
Smart to keep silent until they were gone.
They weren't the only ones as every man in the unit also moved
forward. Kaori cursed aloud as she tried ordering the men back into
position. It was useless as not a single one of them broke stride.
They were quickly at the woman's side, obeying her in ways Kaori was
envious of. Even in this day and age, many men were reluctant to obey
{order : orders} from a woman, even a superior. Now they were acting
like this strange woman was a deity to be obeyed without thought or
question.
Manabu laughed. "What the hell are you supposed to do with that?
Croquet us to death?" The others joined in the laughter.
Well, you already said they weren't very bright.
It was a light push, intended only to move the girl back down in her
seat. However, in a display of complete lack of coordination, the
girl collapsed against the chair, hitting her back against it before
landing hard on the floor.
Good way of showing to any who've forgotten that this isn't the usual
Akane Tendo.
"Come down and play," the guys in the room said, beatific expressions
on all of their faces. As one they turned away from the window and
headed toward the door. Within seconds the room was devoid of
anything containing a Y chromosome.
It made quite a mess when the goldfish in the classroom tank started
flopping out the door.
"That makes sense." Ukyou's hand curled into a fist. "I'm going to
have to{ : ...}" She paused. She was about to say she was going down
there to kick the Enchantress' aging backside. She might as well
admit she was Hawkeye while she was at it. Instead she said, "I'm
going to find somewhere safe to hide, since there's no way a normal
girl like me can take on some supervillain." Accepting the damage to
her reputation in the name of preserving her secret identity, Ukyou
ran away, hoping to find a quiet spot to change into her alter ego.
While she started her search, she hit the emergency beacon on her
Avengers ID card. The team would be alerted to the danger and be able
to home in on her position. While she hoped she could take out the
bimbo without any help, she wasn't taking any chances. Better to have
too much firepower on a false alarm, like their confrontation with
Leap Frog (whose sole power was bouncing around on a pair of springs
in his frog costume), than too little on a world-beater of the
Mandarin's level.
It would be humorous if Ukyou and Akane bump into each other trying to
find someplace to change.
The Hulk was too busy fighting Spragg, the Living Hill --a member of
an alien race whose forms were identical large mounds of dirt--
preventing the large knoll from spearheading an invasion of Earth. He
had no time to answer a second call to battle.
I guess he wasn't smart enough to send the alarm for his little problem.
Hawkeye gulped. She really hadn't planned on fending off all of them.
Lighting fast she started releasing her arrows. Flare, glue, sonic,
bolo, and a variety of other non-lethal types spread into the midst
of the angry mob. Hawkeye was delighted to see Ranma was among those
blinded by the first flare arrow. He was left covering his eyes and
flailing blindly about until his vision returned.
A shame there's no cold water in the barrage.
Now there was a space around the figure and Urd got her first look at
him. He wore a loose red robe with voluminous sleeves and a demon's
mask with two tiny horns at the brow over his face. A pair of
overlapping letter 'D's were on his chest. Currently his hands were
tucked into his sleeves, making it appear as though he had only one
semi-circular arm.
Now comes the puzzle why DareDevil isn't enchanted. Does Urd have to
summon each group separately?
{The Anti- :}Mjolnir 3005 shattered into a hundred pieces, shrapnel
burying itself in just about everything save human flesh.
The armored warrior punched Thor hard in her stomach. The goddess
grunted, but stood her ground, releasing a quick puff of air as the
only {acknowledgement : acknowledgment} that a blow had been landed.
Hawkeye's {damnation : declaration : condemnation} was cut short as
the Executioner, evidently deciding that heads were about as useful
to locomotion as helmets, raised a fist and threw another punch at
Thor.
Yes, Spragg the Living Hill was a true Marvel character that predates
Fantastic Four 1. He was one of their old horror line, though he did
appear in the mainstream universe decades later in the second She
Hulk series. Yes, Leap Frog was a horrible Daredevil villain as well.
A guy in a frog {constume : costume} with springs in the feet. At
least they made him a comedy character later in life.