My god, this was like someone tried to dig up every single tired, old, 
poorly written and completely OOC cliche in Ranma/SM xovers and jam them all 
together. HAd this been an attempt at parody of comedy, or the writer was 
trying to make a point in how awful the Ranma/SM genre could be, that would 
be one thing. However, this appears to have been a serious attempt at a fic, 
which makes it doubly sad since the writer thought
A: Marching out these tired ideas that were bad even before they became 
cliches was a good idea and
B: He's helping to reenforce these tired old cliches by perpetuating them.

This isn't a completely bad fic though in the sense that it highlights what 
one shouldn't do when writing a fic. One can learn as much from mistakes as 
they can from successes. I would recommend people looking this over just to 
see how horribly things can go wrong and learning on what not to do in a 
fic. I'd like to have said somethig more helpful about this thing, but 
others have already gone over it line by line, and I would only be repeating 
what they said. This is one of those rare instances where I recommend 
abandoning a fic as in its current state, it's unsalvagable.

DB Sommer 



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