Lawrence Chu wrote:

Tomo turned to Yomi. "Wow! You think her parents would have learned

their lesson after having her."

Small nit: there's no ambiguity in age when it comes to the Japanese words
for siblings.  Yukari-sensei would be using "otouto" (I think?) when
referring to him, and thusly Tomo's question wouldn't have to be asked.
She can make the snide remark as soon as Yukari mentions that her younger
brother is visiting.

Good point. Will do as you suggest.

"Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said

dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.

I love your Osaka.

Osaka is great for making unintentional humor. Tomo is great for getting a
premise. All the girls are useful in one way or another.

She read it. "You hand out cards with your name, number, and vital

statistics on them?"

I hope that doesn't include size.

Chiyo would hopefully not get it anyway. :)

"Only to cute girls. Saves on time." He moved to the next girl: Tomo.

"And who might you be, my... dear?" He stared at her in bewilderment as
she scratched furiously at her crotch through her skirt. "What's wrong?"

Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem

to identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent
chance it's

contagious. She held out her hand and said in English. "I'm Tomo."

*coughsnerk* A very Tomo-like way out of the situation.  (Although I
wonder if she's the most likely to actually take him up on his offer.)

She thinks even Kimura's a perv, so she's likely to think this guy is too.

Kagura shook her head furiously. "Nope. Definitely girlfriends."

Osaka was in awe. "I guess it's true what they say about love sneaking

up on

you. I never saw this coming at all."

*coughsnerk*

I doubt anyone did. :)

"We can talk about it later."

"Relationships should be filled with open communication," Osaka

insisted. "If you're going to be close-mouthed, I don't think it's going
to work out."

I love your Osaka.

She sees things in a way no one else can. Or should, sometimes. :)

Before Kaorin could take another breath, she found her hand fully

encompassed within Yoshi's own. "Oh, you are, you sweet little thing.
Believe me, you are."

"Only one TENTH?!  How dare you!" *wham*

Kaorin does have her on quite the pedastal.

"This is true," Osaka nodded, her arm still through Kagura's. The

statement

made Kagura sweat profusely.

I love your Osaka.

And it is true, too. :)

Yoshi turned to Yukari. "This is why I came by for a visit. I wanted to

introduce you to my fiancee, Maya."

Maya bowed before Yukari. "Hello, it's so nice to meet you. Yoshi's told

me

everything about you. Even your measurements. They're pretty

impressive."

Hah!  (I'd imagine Yukari actually being kinda proud of that.)

Yes, but not real happy about her brother sharing those measurements with
everyone.

Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really

is related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
something like him."

The others nodded in agreement.

...and now Yukari is, by some deranged twist of fate, actually related to
Kimura.  I wonder how she'll react when she finally picks up on that.

Badly. Very, very, badly.

All in all, it's all the comic timing and laughs I've come to expect from
a Sommer Azufic. XD Great job!

Thanks. Glad you liked it.

DB Sommer

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