On Fri, 26 Nov 2004, elisteran wrote:

It looks like you're doing a nice job of capturing not-grammatically
perfect, but nonetheless accurate dialogue , so I won't bother
pointing out that sort of issue in the narration. 

Most grammar mistakes in here are mine. :-(  The only intentional grammar
mistake is who/whom and a run-on sentence or two.

Earlier you had used Hinada. Oh, and something I had forgotten to
mention from earlier:

What happened here is I thought it was Hinata, looked it up, realized I was
wrong, changed it, and forgot to change one of the references.


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