DB Sommer wrote on 8/27/2004, 11:22 AM:
>
> Finally found some time to write. The second part of his is written, it's
> just a quesition of finding the time to revise it. Hoping to do it either
> today or tomorrow, but this should be enough for now.
>
> Should Old Acquaintance Be Forgot
> Chapter 10
Woo Hoo! Everyone else probably got their C&C in ahead of me, but why
should I let *that* stop me? Bwahahahaaa!
> The offensive power came from the exo-frame embedded in the mesh that
> increased the wearer's strength a five-fold. Its use was limited to about
"*a* five-fold"?
> five minutes before the frame ran out of power, but Dane knew that any
> fight
> against their current opponents would not last five minutes, win or lose.
OpponentS. Hah. Someone wants Our Lovely Heroines (and possibly their
Annoying Testosterone-Poisoned Sidekick) out of the way. Unfortunately,
that only narrows the suspect list down to about half the civilized galaxy.
> There were a variety of pouches and a belt that held a number of smaller
> items at different parts of the body. But they were nothing compared
> to the
> weapons pod that had replaced his right hand. A number of different
> weapons,
> from lasers to masers to projectiles, were concealed in the
> extraordinarily
> versatile attachment that cost more than a standard battle tank. About
> the
> only thing Dane couldn't do with it was scratch his nose.
Not if wants to be able to smell his his next cup of coffee, at least.
> Artus and his sibling, Harrison, were the next to exit, jumping down
> to the
> ground and landing at the exact same time and manner, their knees even
> bent
> at identical angles as their feet hit the duracrete. The albino and his
> dark-skinned brother wore much bulkier exo-frames that were clearly
> visible
> to the naked eye and would provide far more raw strength for longer
> length
Lengths, plural, since you're talking about two frames. Or maybe "for
(a) longer duration(s)"
> of time than Dane's could. This was augmented by golden bracer
> attachments
These. Plural again.
> that ran the lengths of the arms and legs, each with sharp edges that
> would
"their arms and legs"
> make brushing against them a painful experience.
>
> About the only difference in their raiment were the items strapped to
> their
> backs. Slung across Harrison's were twin sledgehammers whose handles,
> bristling with wiring and readouts, indicated they were no mundane
> pieces of
> wood and steel.
Look, Maw! It's John Henry!
>Artus had a large powerback whose cables fed into a
> special
> jackport that was embedded in the back of his neck.
That's it? Huh. Does he really use his head like an anvil? I'm sure
we'll see before long.
> The last to exit was the only one who had less on than when he entered
> the
Sug: "who was wearing less (now) than when he had boarded"
> truck. Stegrax had discarded his trenchcoat, and now stood glistening
> under
> the noonday sun. His cybernetic body was in the shape of a bulky bipedal
> dinosaur. The fierce-looking snout was that of a carnivorous beast, while
> plates stood up on his back and a long spiked tail was attached to his
> rear.
> It appeared the tail should have dragged on the ground due to its length,
> but sensors kept it poised no more than three millimeters above it,
> preventing the extra appendage from causing unnecessary destruction.
He's going to have to counter that weight by leaning forward, though.
Like a kangaroo, or v-raptor.
The
> cyborg's chassis massed at least two tons, and thumped loudly as he
> plodded
> toward the facility.
Metric tons, or English? (:) I hope he's got big feet, or he's going
to sink out of sight like a German tank in Russian mud.
> One of the guards moved forward from the rest of the group, all of
> whom had
Sug: "stepped forward"
> tensed up at the appearance of the newcomers. While he wore the same
> uniform
> as the others, his was different from the rest by the rank on his
> shoulders,
> which indicated he was a sergeant.
I'd trim this down to just: "his (shoulder) rank insignia was that of
a sergeant."
> "Greetings," the sergeant said formally to Dane. His hand started to rise
> up, intending on a handshake, when it stopped as he realized what he
> would
> be trying to shake. He recovered and settled for a deep bow.
Nice recovery.
> Dane didn't bow back. "You that Milon Sancrest guy?"
>
> The sergeant was irritated by the lack of gesture and curtness to Dane's
Sug: "the sergeant appeared irritatet by Dane's rudeness/lack of courtesy"
> voice. "No, he's at the command center keeping a close watch on
> things, in
> case of attack. I'm to take you to him."
>
> "Then let's get going." Dane indicated the sergeant should lead the way.
>
> "I was informed there would be five of you," the sergeant mentioned.
>
> "There are," a quiet voice said in his ear.
>
> The sergeant jumped and nearly went for his side arm. He had never
> heard the
> woman called Whisper approach. She was dressed in a completely different
We already know who Whisper is. Maybe the "the woman" part?
> manner from the others. A skin-tight outfit whose colors seemed to
> shift to
> blend into the background hugged her frame. While it wasn't a perfect
> form
> of camouflage, it made it difficult to see her from anything but straight
> on, especially since she was so slender and unobtrusive. She wore a blue
> visor over her eyes, with a set of wires leading from it to entry
> ports in
> her neck. A couple of small pistols and a bandoleer of shurikens were her
> only form of obvious weaponry.
I'd watch those wires -- too easy to snag. But then, I'm a big fan of
non-exposed wiring.
> "We'd better get going," the sergeant seconded, wanting to put as much
> distance between himself and the creepy newcomers as he could.
>
> The route through the base took time, with security outposts, at
Extra comma
>nearly
> every corner. As they walked, Dane began interrogating their guide. "What
> are the defenses like here?"
>
> The sergeant's mood improved and confidence entered his stride.
> "Holcomb is
> the most secure facility in YSC, outside of the bio center on Arema
> and the
> main headquarters on Danube. The facility is surrounded on all sides by a
> ten meter high wall composed of titanium lined duracrete that can
> withstand
> a bulldozer plowing into it. Every millimeter of the area is watched
Huh. Standing up to a bulldozer is no big deal. Might want a more
dramatic metaphor.
Sug: "every square millimeter"
> above
> and below with overlapping sensors. There's a quarter kilometer of open
> terrain between the inside of the walls and the main building, all of
> that
> watched as well. The building's outer wall is composed of meter thick
meter-thick
> duracrete with ferriman alloy sheets as well, which can resist small
> explosives without being scratched. There are only five entryways into
> the
> facility, all of them with double the normal guard detail and watched as
> well. The control center is deep underground in the base, and
> impervious to
> anything short of a small nuclear explosion. With the current crisis
> on our
> hands, our entire security staff is here, as well as others from
> neighboring
> facilities. We now have over 200 highly trained security personnel on
> site,
> all of them armed with at least high duty laser rifles. We also have
> several
> roving teams with heavier weaponry that operate in sets of four. We're as
> secure as humanly possible."
Which, when you think about it, isn't very. But what can you do?
> "About time I was given something decent to work with," Dane said.
>
> The rest of the journey progressed in silence. They were forced to go
> through no less than three different 'checkpoints' where their identities
> were reconfirmed. Each was a room lined with thick metal doors and
> walls and
> a host of deadly weapons that would be turned on them should they fail to
> pass any of the inspections.
>
> Eventually they came to what the sergeant dubbed the 'inner sanctum' of
> Holcomb. After a half dozen retina, voiceprint, and other nearly
> impossible
> to circumvent security measures, they arrived at the control center of
> the
> facility, where the man in charge of the installation was waiting for
> them.
> He was dressed in the same type of white and gold uniform as the rest
> of the
> security staff, though he had an ostentatious number of bars on his
> shoulders. He appeared to be in his late thirties, and in superior
> physical
> shape.
>
> He rose to greet them, moving stiffly, yet with a cautious step. He
> went to
> shake Dane's hand until, like the sergeant before him, discovered the
"Until he", or "him, he"
> complications that entailed. He bowed, and introduced himself. "Colonel
> Milon Sancrest, formerly of Cartasia and a member of his Imperial
> Warlord's
> Black Troops." His chest puffed out in pride.
I can almost hear the British accent.
> Dane scratched his head. "Cartasian Black Troops? That name sounds
> familiar."
Oh boy, here comes the big insult.
> Harrison spoke up. "We killed about two dozen of them last year on
> Thermagin."
>
> "Why don't I remember them?"
>
> "They were pretty easy to kill," Artus supplied.
>
> "That would explain it," Dane said in satisfaction, smiling at his fellow
> member.
Sug: teammate.
> The veins on Milon's forehead bulged in fury. Before he could bluster
> out an
> insult, Dane spoke, "We'll be taking control of the facility now. I'm
> sure
> you've been doing a... competent job, but the real professionals are
Damn with faint praise, why don't you?
"Dane spoke. 'We'll...'"
> here.
> You just keep operating things like you were while I look over the
> specifics
> and I'll tell you where you need to beef up things."
>
> "I assure you, this building is impenetrable," Milon said, barely
> reigning
> in his anger.
>
> "I doubt that. I can think of three different ways me and my crew could
> crack this nut," Dane bragged.
"bragged" seems a bit off here. Dane seems more like the type who
would make such a remark totally off-handed, almost bored... in order to
*really* rub it in.
> Whisper added, "Of course, if we were breaking into this place, people as
> good as us wouldn't be waiting inside to deal with intruders, would it?"
That would depend on who they hired-- oh, this is a "nobody's as good
as we are" joke, isn't it?
> "Heh, there is that, and that's what'll make the difference when Big Z
> comes
> a knockin'," Dane said as began toying with his weapon's pod.
Weapons pod. No posessive.
I kind of looking forward to seeing this crew get whittled down to size
when Zeiram gets to them.
> Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
>
> Dalia Montenegro was fantasizing about what she was going to do on her
> upcoming vacation. She and her ship, the 'Durango', had just entered
> Terrakon 6's orbit, and all that remained was to land the beast of a
> cargo
> hauler at the spaceport and it was off for a whole week of unadulterated
> fun. Skiing in the Yawew Mountains sounded like the best option. After
> being
> cooped up in a mining ship for the last three months, selling off the ore
> into more manageable trade goods, and finding a buyer on Terrakon 6, she
> needed fresh air, a landscape, and a real sky to gaze up at instead of
> the
> unlimited vastness of space. There was even a certain customs official
> who
> might be worth spending some time with, she could give a ring,. Hot
"with, whom she..." or "give him a ring"
Extra comma.
> tubbing,
> massages, and a handsome man were all Dalia was looking forward to.
> And then the SOS came in.
Oh, crap.
> "Shit!" Dalia punched up the Durango's sensor array in an effort to
> locate
> the source of the distress signal. It was a ship not more than two light
> minutes away.
>
> Even as she began reading the specifics of the message, Dalia hit the
> intercom and shouted to one of her three fellow crewwomen, "Yo, Trace,
...crewwomen. "Yo..."
we
> just picked up an SOS we're two minutes from."
>
> A whiny response came back, "Come on! We're fifteen minutes away from
...back.
> landing, and we're not a rescue ship. Alert the authorities."
>
> It was times like this Dalia hated her fellow shipmates. By the end of
> three
> months of being exclusively in each other's company, all they wanted
> was to
> not be around one another at almost any cost. Experience had taught Dalia
> that working only with women in a confined space was always a bad
> thing. The
> only thing worse would be working with only women and one guy. That had
> happened once. Never again!
Killgore: hey, why's everyone looking at me?
> Dalia's reply was curt and laden with an unspoken warning. "We can't.
> He's
> got a hull breach and venting oxy." She examined the sensor array that
> confirmed that the ship was indeed leaking oxygen. "He might not have
> five
> minutes, depending on how fast he's pissing air. So suit up."
>
> "Right, right. Suit up, people! We're going to move out!"
>
> The intercom went dead.
>
> Dalia guided the Durango alongside the ship in question, another cargo
> hauler, though of a different make and model. There were no visible
That was quick. Two light-minutes is quite a distance. She must've
jumped it, or used warp drive, or something. Not that the plot really
requires the author to bother describing this....
> signs of
> distress, save for the main hatchway being opened ever so slightly.
SETUP!
> Maybe it
> was a systems failure. It didn't matter. The one great law of spacers was
> that any SOS was always answered. Tracy and the others would board the
Yeah, and it's bastards like this who put cracks in the absoluteness of
that law.
> ship,
> find out what was wrong, secure the crew, then let the authorities
> deal with
> it. Dalia had already forwarded the distress call planetside, and they
> had
> assured her rescue units were on the way and would be there in less than
> half an hour.
>
> Through the viewport Dalia watched as the Durango's connecting tube
> affixed
> itself to the ruptured hatch. That would halt the oxygen bleed and enable
> Tracy and the others to board her.
>
> Tracy's voice came over the intercom from her space suit's transmitter.
> "We're ready."
>
> Now that they were firmly connected, Dalia used the tube's overrides
> to pop
> open the other ship's hatch. There was a brief bust of static as she
> heard
> Tracy call out "Holy-" and then static.
>
> There was a moment were Dalia was caught off guard by the cry. It was
"where"
> probably nothing. Tracy was prone to histrionics, and made a big deal
> out of
> nothing. She once had the crew fumigate the entire ship on the basis
She'd once...
>of
> finding one cockroach she herself had probably brought in on her
> uniform or
> something. "Trace, what is it?"
>
> There was no response.
>
> "Aimee, Shan, respond!"
>
> Again, nothing.
>
> Then she heard it. A noise that came from the inside of her ship. A low,
> dull, thumping sound, as though someone was carrying a great weight, and
> each ponderous step sent reverberations through the ship.
>
> Pirates? Could it have been some sort of hijacking? Impossible. No pirate
> would be stupid enough to try to hijack a ship in planetary orbit. The
> authorities would nail them before they made it to the nearest moon. What
> could it be?
Crap.
> The thumping grew louder. Dalia reached under the console and drew the
> laser
> pistol she had concealed there. Whatever was coming, it would end up
> with an
> entire magazine's worth of holes in it. She wasn't a marksman, but
> with only
> two meters between her and the door to the bridge, she didn't have to be.
> Once she had dealt with whoever was approaching, Dalia would go over
> to the
> other ship and find out what happened to her crew. And if anything had
> happened to them, there would be hell to pay.
Gutsy lady, but she should realize that anything that could take out
three of her crew *that* fast isn't something she can deal with
singlehandedly. But people are funny that way.
> The thumping stopped right outside the door. Dalia took a deep breath and
> calmed herself as she held the pistol aimed right at the center of the
> door.
> It wasn't locked. There wasn't a need to. Holing up wasn't an option
> since
> she had to get out here and discover what had happened to her friends.
ITYM "out there." Or "out of here."
>
> The door slid open, revealing the cause of the disturbance.
>
> Dalia would have described herself as having nerves of steel. She had
> flown
> through asteroid belts while being shot at by an irate rival, dealt
> with an
> ejection into space when a ship of hers had exploded, and even outran an
> energy wave from a star that had gone nova when her navigational computer
> had made a near fatal miscalculation. But this, this was more than she
Sug: "near-fatal"
> could
> deal with. The gun faltered slightly as her hand lost its strength.
Sug: "as her grip faltered/loosened (from shock)"
> It was then the white head in the brim of Zeiram's top raced out. That
> snapped Dalia out of her stupor long enough to bring the gun back up. She
> snapped off two shots, both missing the darting head, before it
> clamped its
> mouth on her neck and ripped her throat out.
Damn. Pretty much inevitable, but still... damn.
> xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
>
> "I still say we should have taken Killgore up on his offer and gotten
> a ride
> down with him," Yuri said as the wind from the open air jeep whipped
> through
> her hair.
>
> "No way! I'm not getting any nearer to that bastard than I have to, and I
> don't trust him enough for him not to try something if we're trapped
> on his
> shuttle! The Kreeper V is perfectly capable of atmospheric landings."
Wasn't it "Kreeper IV" before? Or am I misremembering?
> Iria
> made a turn.
>
> "And having two ships on the surface is better than one," Kei added from
> Yuri's side.
>
> "You're just laid back about him cause you got a little action in the
> side,"
> Yuri snapped testily.
<choke> Nice choice of words, Yuri.
> Before Kei could reply, Iria increased the speed of the vehicle as it
> hit a
Sug: Iria floored punched the accelerator as they hit the next turn,
neraly rolling the jeep up onto two wheels.
> turn, nearly causing the jeep to roll over. Kei and Yuri, sitting next to
> one another in the backseat, were squished together as the vehicle
> made the
> turn.
Oh, to be the filling in that sandwich...
> The road turned into a straightaway again and the jeep settled down for a
> smooth, fast, ride.
>
> While they were so close together, Kei whispered into Yuri's ear.
Sug: "as the untangled themselves from each other..."
> "Perhaps
> it would be best if we didn't mention the little fact I slept with
> Mikael in
> Iria's presence. She's a bit testy about it.
Gee, you think?
Missing end quote.
And, ladies? You know about these ancient pre-space inventions called
"Seat belts"?
> "Right," Yuri said warily as she wondered how they had made it this far.
> Killgore had informed them that Terrakon 6 was the next place on
> Zeiram and
> Scorphius' hit list and was only a handful of days away. While he had
> been
> close mouthed about what Zeiram was after here, it was obvious from
I *think* that's supposed to be "closed mouthed," or "close-mouthed"
(closed-mouthed?), but I'm not certain.
the
> women's perspective YSC had figured out Scorphius was after something
> specific and this was the place to steal it.
Or at least the next piece of it. Obviously, he's attempting to
assemble the scattered components of a doomsday weapon. Or all the
Hello Kitty dolls he needs to complete his collection.
> Terrakon 6 was different from the other places Zeiram had hit. So far
> Scorphius had been careful to only attack YSC facilities in isolated
> spots
> that couldn't do much to defend themselves against attacks. While in the
> distant past Zeiram had threatened all of Myce, that had been only after
> several days of preparation in creating an army of Zeirenoids. Now he
Wouldn't that be "Zeiramoids," or "Zeiranoids"?
was
> traveling light, and the possibility of such a huge assault seemed
> slim with
> how little of a head start Scorphius had after the Station Zionacht
> fiasco.
> Terrakon 6 was fully inhabited, and the Holcomb Complex was in the
> middle of
> a megalopolis of twenty-five million people. The armed forces on the
> planet
> were large, and a number of military installations could send warcraft to
> the complex within a handful of minutes. Admittedly, it was unlikely they
> could bring their full force to bear in the middle of their own city, but
> they could take Zeiram down through sheer numbers if it came to that.
One hopes.
> Of course, YSC, in its desperation to not let the public know someone
> with a
> personal ax to grind was using Zeiram to systematically eliminate
> everything
> they owned, had not bothered alerting the local authorities that
> Zeiram was
> coming, and instead were relying on the use of private troops, and
Since yo mention YSC as a singular (its) entity above, technically that
should be "was relying"
> mercenary
> specialists like Killgore, to take Zeiram out. She doubted the planetside
> authorities would be kept in the dark for long once the big green
> destruction machine showed up. Zeiram had a way of making his presence
Heh. How poetic.
> known
> wherever he went. Sort of like herself and Kei, once Yuri thought
> about it.
> That made her frown. They weren't like Zeiram. He went around
> intending to
> cause trouble. For Yuri and Kei, it was just something that seemed to
> happen
> once they arrived.
....I'm not saying a word.
> Since Kei had 'lost' the Lovely Angel's Bouncer, Killgore had offered to
> escort the women planetside in his personal shuttle, since his ship
> wasn't
> designed for atmospheric landings. Yuri was looking forward to the
> idea of
> cozying up to Killgore, especially with Kei out of the running since
> she had
> hooked up with her 'little brother' (Yuri was *never* going to let her
Heh heh heh.
> live
> that one down). However, Iria wouldn't hear of it, citing Killgore was
> more
> untrustworthy than ever since Yuri had discovered her mysterious
> inability
> to contact 3WA headquarters. Kei naturally sided with her former
> guardian,
> and Yuri couldn't really counter the argument, so she agreed to travel
> down
> to the planet in the Kreeper V, leaving Moogi and the battered Lovely
> Angel
Isn't that Mughi? Not that it matters, I suppose.
Hey, can M fly the LA to provide fire support in this version? That'd
be neat to see. What? I like fuzzy pets with high IQ and
semi-opposable thumbs....
> in orbit in case they needed backup.
>
> The landing went smoothly, though Iria had insisted on hiring a
> private jeep
> to drive to the YSC facility instead of using the vehicle the company had
> provided to escort them there. In Yuri's opinion, Iria was being a touch
> paranoid, but as long as she was paying for the rental, it was her
> business.
Given that YSC obviously has something to hide, I wouldn't trust them
too far either. Yuri's not paranoid *enough.*
> Assuming the madwoman didn't crash them into a wall with the reckless way
> she was driving.
Pot, kettle, black?
> The city itself was uninteresting. It looked like any other
> megalopolis, jam
> packed with people and buildings, where anything could be had if you knew
> which section of town to head toward. Currently they were in a shopping
> district. Yuri watched the large stores and their displays of wares,
> including some nice-looking clothing. Maybe if they took care of Zeiram
> quickly, she could do some shopping afterward before heading back and
> informing headquarters of everything that had happened.
That'll be a fun debriefing. Not that I expect to see it for a while yet.
> Eventually they departed the shopping district and ended up in a
> manufacturing one. They traveled unerringly through the streets,
> heading to
> their destination thanks to the internal map that came with the jeep.
Sug: "navigation system"
> They
> took the quickest route through the city, and in less than fifteen
> minutes,
> arrived at the entryway of the Holcomb Building.
>
> Thanks to Iria's reign of terror through the streets, they had arrived
> before Killgore. Now they were forced to wait for him to catch up, since
> only he had permission, and the proper codes, to approach their
"Their"?
>facility.
>
> His vehicle arrived within minutes and he and his men exited the truck,
> relaxed and calm. Yuri noted that he and the two dozen of the
> mercenaries he
> had brought along were already suited up, armed, and eager to go.
>
> "Told you they'd beat us," Cross said to Killgore. The effeminate man
> held
> his hand out expectedly.
Expectantly.
> "Here you go." Killgore handed over a wad of bills, which Cross
> immediately
<snerk> I could almost get to like these guys. Almost.
> tucked into a pocket. Killgore walked over to the women, casual
> despite the
> light armor he wore and the ninety pounds of heavy plasma cannon slung
> across his back. "You must have drove like a maniac to beat us here."
Sug: driven
He
> stared pointedly at Iria.
>
> Kei defended her. "I felt more threatened by Zeiram than Iria's driving."
> "Not by much," Yuri added, running a hand through her hair to make try to
> make herself presentable. While now wasn't the proper place to flirt with
> Killgore, there was never a time when it was acceptable to not look her
> best.
Like, right after destroying an entire inhabited solar system?
> "Let's just get the hell inside," Iria snapped.
>
> Killgore's companions remained behind him as he walked up to the towering
> guard post next to the main entrance to the facility. While there were
> live
> guards present, they remained behind the safety of the walls and observed
> everything through monitors that lined the exterior of the facility.
> Killgore walked up to a video monitor and stated his name and an eight
> letter and number combination. A moment later, a panel slid back and
Sug: eight-digit alphanumeric code.
> several
> other scanning devices came into play. They pored over Killgore, who
> appeared bored by the entire procedure.
Right up until the electrical anal probe...
> "Identity confirmed," came a voice from a speaker. The first set of gates
> opened up to admit the truck and jeep inside.
>
> "Let Dane know I'm coming in," Killgore said, a hint of uncharacteristic
> irritation in his voice. He turned toward the truck, not wanting to
> walk the
> distance to the facility. Just as he was about to enter the back of the
> vehicle, a flashing light from high above caught his attention. "I wonder
> what that is."
Uh. Oh.
Zeiram's doing the "orbital paratrooper" thing, isn't he? But with a
ship, not a parachute.
> Iria and the others stared upward. She dropped the goggles that rested on
> her head over her eyes and activated their telescoping feature.
>
> "Uh oh," she said.
Yeah.
Telescopic.
> xxxxxxxxxxxx
>
> In the central control room of the Holcomb Complex, one of the
> communications personnel relayed a message to his new superior. "The
> front
> gate says Killgore and his people have arrived, Sir."
>
> "Great," Dane grumbled. That had broken the boredom the mercenary had
> been
> suffering from since arriving at the command center, and not in a good
> way.
> He supposed it had been an idle fantasy to expect the target to show up
> before Killgore did. Having the idiot arrive after Dane had bagged Zeiram
> would have been the ultimate victory. He would have bragged about pulling
> one out from under Killgore's nose from one end of the galaxy to the
> other,
> smearing his rival's name in the dirt. The possibility still existed,
> but it
> was trickier with Killgore present. Dane would just have to put more
> effort
> into outmaneuvering his rival, while nailing Zeiram at the same time.
Great. A defense team divided against itself. Why don't you just
invite Z in the front door, you moron?
> At least by arriving first Dane had control of the facility, even if
> Killgore was technically an independent and didn't have to take direct
> orders from Dane. At least the oversized buffoon wasn't in charge of the
> situation this time. Dane make Killgore stay out of the way once
Uh? Maybe Dane "planned to" make...
Zeiram
> showed up, and he was certain that time was coming soon. His hunter's
> instinct was telling him something big was coming, and it was rarely
> wrong.
That's just the Angels.
> Maybe he'd get lucky, and Zeiram would knock off Killgore before Dane
> finished the monster himself and earned the hefty bonus for successful
> completion of the secondary objective. He handled the small cylinder
> at his
Wait -- Z is his *secondary* objective? That's what that sentence
construction makes it sound like. Now I'm going to have to go back and
re-read the last chapter again.
> waist. Oh yes, he was going to receive a large injection of cash above
> and
> beyond the standard contract fee before this mission was over.
>
> Warning claxons blared in the control room. One of the technicians
> manning
> the exterior sensors reported to Dane, "A ship is approaching us from
...Dane.
> orbit
> at a high speed."
>
> "It's trying to land?" Dane asked.
>
> "No sir, it's coming way too fast for that, and it's heading right for
> the
> center of the facility."
This is what we in the biz call a "lithobraking reentry." Also the
"big hole" landing.
> "We don't have anything that can take it out!" another technician warned.
Sug: "...that can take out a spaceship (that size)!"
Or at least, nothing that's kamikaziing. A ship that tried *landing*
inside their permiter would probably be dog meat.
> Dane turned to Sancrest. "Impenetrable, huh?" He ducked under a
> console and
> waited for the inevitable.
Cool under fire, I have to admit.
> Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
>
> "Get down!" Iria cried as she grabbed Kei and Yuri and ducked behind the
> jeep, using its body for additional cover. There wasn't time to figure
> out
> the trajectory of the ship as it spiraled down toward the planet. If
<pedant> "spiral" isn't really the appropriate word here. A ship
re-entering hot will, by the time it hits visual range, look a lot like
a fly ball does to an outfielder.
Just bigger. Lots bigger. And brighter, and more firey. But the
trajectory will look pretty much the same.
> large cargo hauler hit near them, it was over anyway, but if it struck
> the
> center of the facility or the far side, they would have a chance.
Especially with the wall between them and the impact zone. Frankly,
the jeep won't do much at all to save them, but the wall definitely could.
> Iria's hopes were realized as the breaking jets on the rectangular
> spaceship
> ignited, slowing its decent enough to, while not arrest its progress,
> prevent it from striking so hard nothing would be left but a huge crater.
> Instead the hauler landed straight as an arrow, front first in the
Sug: bow-first
> middle of
> the complex. The ship's velocity caused it to easily shatter the building
> and destroyed a major portion of the interior as well as crumpling its
> own
> front, squeezing it down almost like a giant accordion as the weight
Front->bow, again. Or maybe prow.
> and
> inertia caused the front to buckle from the stress.
>
> There were no explosions, nor did the vehicle tip over. It rested
> above the
Wait a minute. A spaceship crash in an anime and there aren't any
*explosions*? What is this, Project A-ko?
> ruins of the center of the sprawling complex, like a compact tombstone
> dedicated to its own demise.
Nice metaphor.
> xxxxxxxxx
>
> Dane poked his head from below the desk. He heard the impact, felt the
> building tremble, and saw the lights in the control room flicker once.
> Then
> there was nothing else. Surprised, but in a pleasant way, he poked his
> head
> up and surveyed the room.
I assume the control room is a respectable distance underground?
> Others were in similar positions, having abandoned their posts and taking
> shelter under their consoles in the hopes of surviving the impact. All
> that
> was save Stegrax, who hadn't moved the entire time. When it became
> obvious
> their impending destruction had been averted, an air of relief and cool
> professionalism took over the staff as they returned to their jobs.
>
> The technician that had first observed the spacecraft heading toward them
> pieced together what had happened. "The craft's decent was slowed at
Descent. There's nothing decent about Z.
>the
> last minute. It still hit hard, but not enough to crack the reinforced
> bunkers on the lower levels or anything in the outer areas of the
> complex."
>
> Another spoke up. "I'm getting responses from people in the outer
> areas and
> lower levels. Most of them seem okay. I'm getting nothing from the
> center of
> the complex, though."
>
> A third said, "Destruction's near total there. Damn, my cousin was
> working
> in one of the chem labs there." He pounded his fist on the console he
> manned, then bit down on the fist in worry.
>
> By that time, Dane had fully recovered and assessed the situation,
> coming to
> the only possible conclusion. "Boys and girls, Zeiram has landed and
> managed
> to not only penetrate our much vaunted defenses," he shot Sancrest a
> smirk.
"...smirk,"
> "but took out a major portion of the security forces here, as well as
> causing so much chaos that if I wasn't paying attention, he'd probably
> get
> out of this without anyone firing a shot at him."
You have to admit, this is something a little beyond anything a
corporate security force might expect. More like a decent-sized
military force.
> "He couldn't possibly have survived the crash," Sancrest claimed,
> trying to
> regain some standing in the eyes of anyone present.
>
> Dane shook his head. "He once survived atmospheric reentry without a
> spaceship. He can survive that little crash, especially since he
> slowed down
> at the end. He probably didn't want to take a chance of destroying the
> lower
> levels and ruining what he's come here for." Dane turned to the
> communication's technician. "Alert all security forces to gather into
> their
> units and patrol the facility in their pre-assigned routes until they
> locate
> Zeiram. He won't be hard to miss. He's big, green, has a head shaped
> like a
> giant mushroom, and will be trying to kill everything that comes into his
> line of sight."
Concise and proffessional. Too bad he's a backstabbing murderous SOB
who needs be die, badly.
> "But sir, shouldn't we have people start with rescue efforts and try
> to help
> the injured first?" the man who had lost his cousin mentioned.
>
> Dane waved dismissively at the man. "Alert the city emergency systems, if
> they haven't been already. Zeiram's continued presence here is more
> dangerous." And Dane wouldn't get paid for wasting time saving easily
> replaceable personnel anyway. Everyone in the entire complex could
> die, for
> all he cared. Only Zeiram mattered.
Like I said.
> Whisper was at his side in an instant. "What about that message we
> received
> right before the ship dropped into our lap?"
> "Oh, yes." Dane had forgotten that little detail. Now that he
> considered the
> matter, he realized that the chaos might be providing him with a unique
> opportunity. He gave an order to the communication technician. "Tell all
> security forces to assume anyone going about armed, that is not one of
> them
> or a member of my crew, is hostile and shoot on sight. I'll take full
Sug: ...hostile and to be shot on sight.
> responsibility." He shot the technician a warning glare.
>
> The technician picked up on the hint. "Yes, sir." He sent out the order.
>
> Dane turned to the rest of his partners and said with intentionally
> melodramatic flair, "Now it's time for us to go out into this brave world
> and see if we can't dispose of an annoying monster and some irritating
> rivals." He turned to go, shouting over his back to the staff, "Let me
> know
> if Zeiram's spotted or if there's trouble."
>
> He waved good-bye to the room's occupants as he led the rest of his
> people
> deeper into the facility.
>
> Xxxxxxxx
>
> "That was no accident. It was Zeiram," Iria stated in cold terms as
Sug: stated coldy
> she rose
> from her position behind the jeep. It had served as sufficient protection
> from the heat, wind, and debris kicked up by the crash. She hadn't
But they're still outside the wall, right? That should have protected
them a lot more than the jeep would have.
> suffered
> a scratch, nor had Kei or Yuri as they also returned to their feet.
>
> Killgore and the other two dozen members of his staff exited the back
> of the
> truck and the protection its armored walls had provided, equally
> unharmed.
>
> Some of the security personnel manning the front gate exited the guard
> post,
> watching in stunned disbelief at the crumpled ship as it stood up
> embedded
> in the facility, like an arrow driven into the body of an animal that had
> died instantly and fallen on the spot.
Or like a spear stapling someone to the ground.
> Killgore took charge of the matter as he grabbed the leader of the men by
Sug: grabbed the most senior security guard by...
> his collar. "Get us in there."
>
> That shook the man out of his stupor. He ran as fast as he could with the
> others, heading directly for the main doors. The distance was covered in
> just over a minute with how fast everyone ran, even under the burden of
> their equipment.
Awkward. Sug: They covered the distance in under a minute, despite
the burden of their gear.
> The security head tried opening the door, but the lights of the
> scanner were
> dark. "There's no power to the doors. I can't get them open."
These are the doors of the central building, correct?
> Killgore turned to two of his men. "Door opener."
>
> Everyone in the unit, save two men he had spoken to, moved to the side of
> the wall along the doors. The two exceptions instead moved in front of
> the
> doors, then removed large blocks of some rectangular substance from their
> packs. They peeled off a strip of paper from the back of the items, and
> stuck them to the doors, where the rectangles affixed themselves. They
> then
> placed small pieces of metal with a digital readout on the top, onto the
> items. The men pushed a few buttons, and several lights activated.
>
> Seeing the reactions from the rest of Killgore's crew, and recognizing
> the
> items as fusion blocks, Iria and the Lovely Angels moved alongside the
> wall
> as well.
Yipe! Better have that SPF-50000 sublock handy. A "fusion" reaction
at that range'll cook anyone's goose.
> Within moments the two people that had set up the explosives joined the
> other's sides. They pulled out remote detonators and set off the charges.
> There was the sound of a small explosion, then nothing.
>
> Everyone removed themselves from the wall and saw that the barrier of
Sug: stepped away from the wall
> metal
> now had two holes large enough for two people to walk abreast in there.
"in there"? Sug: to walk abreast through.
> Point men from Killgore's team entered first, guns at the ready. After
> determining the entryway was as deserted as it appeared, they signaled
> the
> rest of the team to follow.
>
> Once everyone (save the security guard who had chosen to rejoin his
> men and
> wait for new orders) had set up in the entryway, Killgore began to issue
> instructions.
>
> "It looks like the long bout with boredom we feared was waiting for us
> was
> all for naught, boys and girls," he quipped. "Zeiram's crawling around
> somewhere in this pit, and I want him dealt with once and for all. We're
> going to separate into teams of four and prowl around until Zeiram is
> located. Once you find him you will not confront him. Instead you will
> alert
> the other teams and then track his movements until we set up an ambush
> point
> to waste him. I don't want any heroics, so don't think you can take
> him out
> yourselves and get killed. Got it?"
>
> There was a collection of affirmatives and head nodding.
Marked difference from Dane, here. But then, K's got a better idea of
what he's facing.
> "Good. I'm in charge of team one. Cross is head of team two. Cha-where
> are
> you going?" he asked Iria as she grabbed Kei and Yuri by the arms and
> made
> to leave.
>
> "To kill Zeiram, so don't get in the way," she said.
>
> "It'd be safer for us to take him on with everyone around," Killgore
> pointed
> out.
>
> "It's safer not to rely on you or your scumbag partners," she said icily.
>
> The proclamation met with a host of angry glares from the men.
Hmm. Real scumbags wouldn't be offended, usually. These guys have at
least some sense of being the "good guys."
> Yuri tried to placate any hard feelings, especially since she'd rather
> not
> have the men try to shoot her in the back for being offended. "What she
> means is, you guys are used to working as a team, and we'd just get in
> the
> way. Besides, we work better on our own. I'll give you a ring if I spot
> Zeiram," she assured them as she turned to catch up to her partner and
> the
> outer rim bounty hunter.
>
> Once they were out of earshot, Cross said, "You know, she's right
> about them
> being in the way."
>
> "Just find Zeiram. I'll take care of them later, when the time comes,"
> Killgore assured him.
Of course, that doesn't mean the Iria's wrong...
> The team separated into groups of four and began a search of the
> building.
Hm. With 25 men, K's got five teams of four and one of five (counting
himself as the 25th man).
> Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
>
> "Have you ever considered a career as a diplomat?" Yuri inquired of
> Iria's
> back, since the bounty hunter had all but run down the corridors since
> leaving the entryway behind, not giving Yuri a chance to catch up.
>
> "I'd be great at it, since everyone would know that whatever comes
> from my
> mouth must be the whole and honest truth," Iria said, though the retort
You'd *think* that there would be a role for people like that in
diplomacy. Or, maybe not -- whenever you replaced them with someone
else, everyone would *know* you were lying, instead of just suspecting it.
> lacked any vigor. Her attention was solely for what lay in front of them.
>
> "All I'm saying is our lives might depend on one of Killgore's men at
> some
> point, and It would be a major pain if they decide not to do anything
> since
> they'd be happy if we were dead."
>
> "It's already coming," Iria assured her. "Keep your eyes open for it."
Is it still paranoia when they really *are* out to get you?
> "Whatever." Yuri officially gave up. With any luck, they'd finally kill
> Zeiram and put all of events from the last week behind them. This was
> possibly the worst chase in her life, largely because she didn't feel
> like
> she was gaining on her foe. If anything, the gap between them was
> widening.
> Not only had they not slowed Zeiram down, but it appeared he (or more
> specifically, Anton Scorphius) was accomplishing everything he wanted to,
> and running up a body count impressive even by Yuri's standards in the
> process. It had to come to an end soon, one way or another.
Can't be allowed to break the Angels' record, after all.
> Her ponderings were interrupted as they came to a four way junction and
> spotted a pair of security guards that had turned the corner at the
> end of
> the hallway in front of them. They appeared tense with their rifles
> firmly
> in their grip. Yuri decided to take charge, before Iria did something
> to set
> them off. She put her best smile on, thrust her chest out slightly, and
> waved. Hey guys, how are you doing? We're trying to find Zeiram. I
Missing opening quote.
Now, *Yuri* has some idea of diplomacy. At least, for dealing with
guys. That tactic might not work so well on women. Well, straight
ones, at least.
don't
> suppose you've seen him."
>
> The men stared at each other. Then their reflexes kicked in as they said,
> "Intruders!" and leveled their guns at the trio of women.
>
> Yuri was caught off guard. "No, we were let in by-"
>
> Kei tackled Yuri out of the way as a laser nearly parted her hair. They
> ducked behind one of corners of the junction, while Iria went for the
> other.
>
> "Have you ever considered a career as a diplomat?" Iria said as several
> other bolts streaked down the corridor they had just been walking down.
>
> "All I said was 'Hi'," Yuri snarled as she drew her pistol.
Obviously those guards are gay. Have to be.
> "It's not that big a deal. We're used to complete strangers shooting
> at us,"
> Kei said.
>
> "Usually it's preceded by, 'Look! It's the Dirty Pair!' though. These
> guys
> had no idea who we were. They just decided to shoot first and not bother
> with the whole questions part." Making certain she was still under
She's got a point.
> cover,
> Yuri shouted to the men, "Hey, we're on your side! We were hired to
> help you
> in case the place was attacked, which it has been."
>
> One of the guards shouted back. "Like we'd fall for that! We know you're
> part of the bad guys, just like we were told!" Several more shots were
> fired
> in Yuri's direction.
That's kind of awkward. I'd suggest chopping off the "we know" part
entirely.
> "Looks like we're really on our own." Iria pulled a small disc, shaped
> like
> a hockey puck, from one of her pouches. "Close your eyes and cover your
> ears," she warned, as she once again slipped her goggles over her eyes
> and
> pulled the sides down to cover her ears.
>
> Yuri and Kei had to satisfy themselves with closing their eyes and
> covering
> their ears with their hands.
>
> Iria poked her hand far enough around the corner to slide the disc
> along the
> floor. When it hit the far wall next to the men, it went off. Even
> with her
> protective gear, the flash and noise was powerful enough to make her eyes
> water and ears pop.
>
> The bounty hunter poked her head around the corner, pistol at the ready.
> Both men lay on the floor. One was unconscious from the stun bomb,
> while a
> low moan issued from the other, who was curled up in a fetal position
> on the
> floor.
Harsh, but better than the alternative.
> Iria pulled out a small tube from her belt and pressed it against the
> back
> of the man's neck. She hit the plunger and a small white pad stuck
> itself to
> his neck. Within seconds he went limp.
>
> As she did the same thing to the second man, Kei and Yuri, who had judged
> whatever it was Iria had done was over, approached.
>
> "What are you doing?" Kei asked.
>
> "Administering a sedative that will keep them out for the next ten hours.
> I'm not taking any chances on them recovering and attacking us from
> behind,
> and it's more humane than
> shooting them."
>
> "What kind of sedative?" Kei asked.
>
> "Obifrol-108."
>
> Kei grimaced. "I got hit with that once. It leaves you with a hangover to
> remember."
>
> "I did say 'humane' not 'pleasant.' It's the least they deserve for
> shooting
> at me."
>
> "And from what he said, I have a feeling the rest of the guards will be
> trying to treat us the same way." Yuri sighed in resignation. "Great,
> instead of having a small army helping us hunt Zeiram, we have a small
> army
> trying to hunt us and Zeiram. It's never the easy way, is it?"
>
> Kei and Iria merely nodded their heads sadly.
Okay, this is where I had to stop and just snicker for a while.
> Iria's communicator beeped. "Yes?"
>
> "Problem, Sunshine," came Killgore's voice. "Someone seems to have
> told the
> security forces here that any intruders, meaning us, are to be considered
> hostile and shot on sight."
>
> "We've already encountered that little problem." Iria nudged one of the
> unconscious men with her boot.
>
> "It's all that bastard, Dane's fault. He knew we were coming, and
> decided to
> try to take out a little competition using these guys in the
> confusion. He'd
> better pray Zeiram finds him before I do. He'll only get devoured and
> turned
> into a Zeirenoid. What I'll do to him will be much, much worse."
>
> "I see," Iria said. "Well, marrying him seems a bit extreme, but I
> have to
> agree, it'd be worse than running into Zeiram." She turned off the
*Geez!* Like, MEOWRRR!
> communicator before he could respond.
>
> "That has got to be one of the nastiest divorces ever," Yuri whispered to
> her partner. Kei could only nod in response.
ROTFL!
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