Richard Lawson was so nice to say...

Ah, KOR remains one of my favorite manga - that is, if you disregard the
middle two-thirds of the volumes and only pay attention to the beginning 
and
the end of the manga.  =)

Anyway, glad to see someone writing KOR stories still.  I miss KOC.

Have you read KORF?

I'm aware that "Oneechan no Madoka" has no name.

Yeah, and it's an interesting enigma.  What made Madoka the way she is - 
did
her sister have something to do with it?  How much of Madoka's upbringing
was her sister's responsibility?  There's a whole story there that's ripe
for exploration. =)

My thoughts exactly, especially since KORF is all about the details, plot 
holes, etc that the manga/TV/OAVs left out.

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Ugh.  I don't like this... I don't think it's something you'd mention in an
engagement announcement at all.  "And I'd like to thank Barry, who if he
hadn't dumped me and left me emotionally devastated, I wouldn't have gotten
together with Gary on the rebound!"  You'd mention that happy, positive
things in a public announcement, and leave the "We don't blame you for it 
at
all" conversations for a more private time.

It's going to change. Both reactions I've recieved to this is that it's a 
bad idea. I'll try to come up with something more politic. Perhaps work the 
line into a conversation at a table or in the ladies room. We know Hikaru 
will never stop loving Kyosuke. Madoka would not be this insensitive, and I 
should have realized that.

Overall... I like the *idea* behind the story very much.  Trying to define
the relationship between Madoka and her sister is a daunting task, and I
applaud you for undertaking it.  I think the execution is a little clumsy,
though.  It's too short, too fast, too much packed into too little.

It'll probably needs it's own chapter in KORF. Perhaps one with a bit of 
reconciliation. Misako's jealousy needs to be addressed.

If you're going to explore this idea, I think you need to give it a little
more room to breathe.  Spread out the thoughts, the details, the 
characters.
Allow some interaction between Misako and her husband and Madoka, let all 
of
Misako's internal observations arise out of that.

Kyosuke will have to be part of it, if only as a bystander. He is, after 
all, his own narrator. I'll have to tell a lot more through actions Kyosuke 
can see and dialogue he can hear.

Great idea, though.  Would love to know more about Misako and Madoka.

So would I. Thanks for your comments.

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