Per the commentary and criticism I did recive, I determined that a rewrite of the last seven chapters I have posted was needed.  Certain aspects needed to be expanded upon, characterizations needed to be added, etc.

The over all plot has remained the same but numerous revisions have been added, making most chapters a little over 100k each plain text.

Now, do I post a chapter a day, all at once, or just give them to Larry for the Library?  I am going over final re readings so they will be ready in about a week, and figured I'd take a poll to see how it should be handled.  I am hoping for some feedback to see if further revision is needed, and if there are any volunteers for C&C, please let me know.  As massive as the combined chapters are, I don't want to flood mailboxes. (see I can learn!)

LSMcGill

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