Subject: [FFML] Re: [FMP][Lemon][Oneshot] Let the World Slip
From: Jim Miller
Date: 12/8/2003, 11:37 PM
To: Cat Who , ffml@anifics.com


--On 12/7/2003 12:28 AM -0500 Cat Who wrote:

A Full Metal Panic Lemon (Kaname/Sousuke)

Cool.  I love FMP. :-)

Kaname rolled her eyes. Sousuke viewed the world through danger-colored 
glasses. Occasionally he was correct, and some offbeat group that had 
heard of the Whispered tried to kidnap her or endanger her. During 
those times she was grateful for the protection Sousuke gave freely. 
She knew that as long as he was able, he would not let anyone hurt her. 
It was odd that the only other person he trusted so completely was 
Tessa, but perhaps the unique bonds that linked the minds of the 
Whispered also linked their hearts.  

Should that be "...only other person _s_he trusted..."?  If not, the last
sentence doesn't really fit in with the rest of the paragraph.

"It appears to be some sort of lubrication." 

LOL!

"We did expend a lot of energy running. Now, I have to continue to find 
that weapons kit. I don't want to leave here without backup around." 

Perhaps "...to search for that weapons kit."  

was floating in.   She held him close, and bit her lip in wonder as a 
brilliant flash over light overtook her, setting every nerve in her 

"...flash of light..."

I'm not sure how the title is related to the story.  But it's a cute story,
I like it.  

Jim

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