Very good indeed.  Just a couple of minor corrections, as far as I can
see:

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "William O'Halloran" <nuki_mouse@hotmail.com>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>; "Beth" <mohallo1@tampabay.rr.com>; "Nuki_mouse"
<nuki_mouse@hotmail.com>
Sent: Saturday, August 16, 2003 12:58 AM
Subject: [FFML] [FFML][Spamfic] "Demon"

  I wrote this for the weekly Fanfiction Challenge at Live Journal's

Anime 100.  The Challenge was to write in exactly 100 words, a story base
on the topic "Facing Down Your Nemesis"

  I thought it turned out pretty good but I'm biased, so I'm posting it

here to see what the FFML community thought of it.  C&C is greatly
desired.

************
Demon

A whisper of sound caused him to turn and spy the demon slowly stalking

him.

Hair covered its body, its claw's were razor sharp and

                                     ^^claws (plural not possessive)
inhuman eyes glowed bright as it watched his every move.

Terror griped his soul and the demon sensed it, it wanted to

          ^^gripped (grabbed him, not him "complaining")
"play."

He knew if he ran, it would be on him in seconds, driving him insane.

He must face it and show no fear. He was a man, not a mouse!

It approached and for once, he struck first.

Now what do I do? Thought Ranma, holding the kitten at arms

                             ^^thought (this is part of the same phrase)
length.

**********

Well, what do you think?
Nuki Mouse

I think you should try doing this more often.  It's great for stretching
the mental muscles.

June



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