Subject: [FFML] Re: Fragment of the Dream, Ch 3: Explanation [3/??] [IY] [R]
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Date: 3/8/2003, 1:02 PM
To: <iy-fanfics@yahoogroups.com>, <inuyashaffml@yahoogroups.com>, <inuyashaecchifanfics@yahoogroups.com>, <ffml@anifics.com>, "Vash The Stampede" <vash@xmission.com>


Vash wrote:


"You do realize," Inu-Yasha said, eyes bright with an emotion somewhere
between rage and hate,

Not a whole lot of room between the two. :)


Kikyou sat in silence before her irate almost-lover and the whimpering
kitsune cub that had joined him early in his quest to find the shattered
Shikon no Tama. The kitsune's soft sniffles didn't move her cold spirit,
but Inu-Yasha's rage battered her heart like the typhoon's gale winds. He
was angry at her for what she'd done, and he didn't even realize that
she'd
done it with him in mind.

Probably wouldn't care. :)


Never before had Kikyou's voice so battered Inu-Yasha, nearly sweeping his
hand from he

her

arm with physical force. He released her without a bit of
protest, and flexed his now empty hand. But he didn't stop talking, though
he lost momentum and certainty, "K-Kikyou."

"Stop." she

Stop!

"Nothing," she retorted, her eyes fixing darkly on his. "Nothing.
intentionally."

drop period after nothing


Dropping down to squat before her, resting his weight on the balls of his
feet, his arms on his knees, he peered at her quizzically. There was
something amiss here, but it was not in her words. She was being honest,
that much he could tell. It made him put aside his anger, but left in it's

its

wake a certain apprehension that he could not leave alone so easily.

"You're telling me that the miko of the Shikon no Tama was

drop 'was'


"And then what?" Inu-Yasha demanded. "What happened? What happened to
Kagome and Miroku and Sango!"

"I believe their energies may have interfered with the spell; they did not
exist in that time."

Inu-Yasha threw up his hands, and stalked to the other side of the shrine
and back again, swearing hotly. His face was red, his hands clenchedshe'd

space here

never seen him in such a state of agitation.

Working the fury from his system, he rounded on her, cutting the air with
one hand as if to slice away her arguments. "You're going to tell me how
to
undo that spell. You're going to bring my friends back from that . that.
where-ever you put them! And you're not leaving my sight until you do! Do
you understand? You go to far!"

too far


And that cut more deeply then Naraku's claws could have ever gone.

Very brief. but effective. It felt more like a single scene than a chapter.
Nice work

DB Sommer




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