On Mon, 24 Feb 2003 13:26:43 -0500 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:
You know, reading this over again has shown me that some of my revisions
have disappeared. Made your work that much harder. Methinks I accidentily
erased them with an earlier copy. >_<
Bummer. I look forward to seeing the final re-revision.
Nabiki found herself pulled back over the railing and set gently
down on her feet. She straightened up her dress, and took an
assessment of her condition. Her ankle was a little tender from
how powerfully it had been grasped, and her leg was a bit sore
from the quick jerk, but considering what the alternative of
{not :} being caught was,
Oops. You're right. Took me a while to figure it out.
I almost read past it too.
I liked that ... ah ... fight scene. It seems rather poetic that
Kunou would take Ranma down like that.
It was all by accident. :)
Which made it even better.
Ranma-chan let out an "AHHH!" at the top of her lungs, then ran
out of the shower and locker room as though the all the demons of
hell were hot on her tail.
Nice turn of phrase since someone is after her tail.
Heh. Didn't think it was that obvious early on. Tried to mask it,
though the truth comes out in little pieces here and there.
I was watching closely for just how Shampoo would be different from
canon. I also saw the rugmunching exchange with Shampoo, Nabiki, and
Ranma while spell checking part B. Odd that rugmunching wasn't in
my wordprocessor's dictionary, maybe it's supposed to be
hyphenated. :}b
The girl looked over her shoulder in the direction she had run.
"Some crazy chick is after me. You have to hide me quick."
Under Sayuri's dress seems like an obvious place.
Sayuri isn't that big. Now if she had been Dojo Destroyer sized,
it might have worked. :)
With a cute, naked chick, I'm sure she'd be willing to try. It would
probably confuse Ranma since she hasn't had her very close encounter
with Shampoo yet and that would disappoint Sayuri.
"Ha! If only it was that simple!" Ranma-chan said as she and Akane
exited the school grounds and kept on running. "That girl's out to
kill me."
Only if too much sex can kill a girl.
I suppose it could, but Shampoo is nowhere near that energetic. :)
We also know that's not really Shampoo's intention. Killing that is,
she does want lots of sex and that would probably be better for her if
she can keep her partner alive.
They certainly seemed to be getting along well before.
That was before the 'who has the best chest' contest. Shampoo is
also not going out of her way to be friendly. A little friction
between her and Akane will be a nice source of conflict.
I was actually thinking of the contest itself. They all were very
free with their hands. I admit it was rather competetive on Shampoo
and Akane's parts though.