Hello.  A few comments...

"Your influence on that whole subject is EXACTLY the reason Akane's not 

speaking >right

now, you know!"

 "... not speaking to us/him right now, you know!"

Good Ranma smiled, thinking of the possibilities of the future.

She looked at him and smiled. "Let's do it."

Used smiled twice.  Might change that. Maybe

'Good Ranma paused, thinking of the possibilities of the future.'

Or something.  Just a thought.

Overall, very nicely written.  I like the premise, with letting Good Ran 
getting control for a week.  I can't wait to see some of the possibilities...

Looking forward to more...

Dave Fox

"I can't take HIS money.  I can't print MY OWN money.  I have to work to GET 
money.  Why don't I just lay down and DIE?!"
Homer Simpson



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