_Very_ interesting idea (although the general framework of the most honorable
'out' for Shampoo has always struck me as obvious), and good setup regarding
the hallucinations/visions/family visitation. Only two points to make (aside
from the usual spelling/grammar goofs in a first draft).
--- Caleb <caleb_david@angelfire.com> wrote:
"Your a powerful Amazon, Xian Pu." The intruders Mandarin was
like cold steel,
First, I think it has been confirmed that her name (according to the best
transliterations) is Shan Pu. Second, I doubt the Joketsuzoku are closly akin
to Han Chinese or speak Mandarin among themselves much (Qinghai provence is a
sparsely populated place wedged between Tibet and East Turkistan, and
incidentally too far west to have much first-hand experience with the tender
mercies of the IJA).
HTG
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