Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Tue, 20 Aug 2002 22:38:49 +1200 R E <ranma_e@hotmail.com> wrote:
A small man, silhouetted against the fireplace, sat motionless before them
{amongst : in} a simple room of wood and stone. Ranma stepped into the room
whilst Akane waited on the threshold, watching closely.
"I don't know why it happened, but it means that you must fulfil your
family's legacy, or {you :: you must} conceive a child to do so."
"The cloak is water imbued with a scale of the Grand Dragon Ryujin. It is
water to her fire; it holds her back, hides her from the hunters who follow
her. She would not be ... pleasant without it.
Ranma is not very ... pleasant with it. When Akane discovers that it is
part of her essence that helps contain Ranma, it may make Akane's
acceptance of her own nature easier.
Akane nodded. Happosai, seeing her nod, stood and walked {toward : to} a cabinet
that rested against the nearest wall. Opening it, he peered inside,
searching back and forth with one hand until he found what he was looking
for. With a sound of satisfaction, he pulled the object out of the
cabinet.
"You," Happosai continued, seeing the Tendo girl's utterly blank stare,
"are Grand Dragon Ryujin the Blue, Lady of Light, Life and Water, the sworn
enemy of Ryukyu the Red."
Good point to end the scene.
"That's {rediculous : ridiculous}, I'm just saying--"
"All right," Ranma said with a nod. She pursed her lips, staring {inot : into} the
fireplace for a moment longer before turning her gaze to the old man.
"Happosai?"